Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Dron (second nomination)

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The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was unsuccessful. Please do not modify it.

Dron

(2 Inqs/1 Users/3 Total)

Support

  1. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 23:58, September 15, 2011 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote --Eyrezer 08:49, October 30, 2011 (UTC)
  3. Clone Commander Lee Talk 14:20, November 7, 2011 (UTC)

Object

Floyd:
  • In the intro, a mention of exactly when the expedition to Ukio occurred would be helpful.
    • Qualified it with "early stages" since an exact date isn't known.
  • Also, info on what the mission's objective was would be useful to add where it is mentioned first in the intro.
    • Done.
  • In the intro, you link to a Battle of Ukio, although no mention of a battle is given in that section, just that Ukio was "tactically saved".
    • Rejiggered.
  • Again, a mention of the expedition's exact time frame would be helpful in the body.
    • Done.
  • "When the fleet had entered the system, Dron informed Reus, who advised him to have the frigates form a sentry line, before initiating a yellow alert." Advised him of what? That the fleet had entered the system? Clarify.
    • I meant it in another way, so I've changed.
  • Context on the Ukian liege.
    • Done.
  • Not sure, but I bet the P&T could be beefed up some.
    • He really just stands around like a spare... something. What little personality he does show has been extracted.
  • IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 01:20, September 7, 2011 (UTC)
    • Thanking you for the review, and sorry for the late reply. Thefourdotelipsis 06:56, September 14, 2011 (UTC)
Eyrezer

To be honest, I don't think this is your best work. The prose feels quite static and simple. Anything you can do about this? --Eyrezer 10:06, September 15, 2011 (UTC)

  • Can you provide some examples, just so I know what I'm looking for? Thefourdotelipsis 07:12, October 3, 2011 (UTC)
    • I'm striking this as the prose is fine, just not as excellent as I expect. --Eyrezer 09:16, October 26, 2011 (UTC)
Tommy
  • It gets reeeal PBPish in "A disturbance."—Tommy 9281 Thursday, December 8, 2011, 20:37 UTC

Comments

  • Regarding the last nomination's failure, some of the offending sentences have been tweaked to shift the focus back to Dron. Personally, I feel that the context is required for the bio to make any sense, but if anyone takes further umbrage with it... er... so be it, and we'll worry about it then. Thefourdotelipsis 07:25, August 30, 2011 (UTC)

Vote to remove nomination (Inq only)

  1. Inqvote Idle objection for three weeks. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:50, January 1, 2012 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 19:46, January 1, 2012 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote CC7567 (talk) 06:33, January 2, 2012 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Menkooroo 21:25, January 4, 2012 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote 1358 (Talk) 23:52, January 6, 2012 (UTC)