Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Dromund Kaas operation

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Dromund Kaas operation

  • Nominated by: Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 18:38, April 20, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: The second of my GAs-merged-with-other-articles-and-FAN'd articles. Project Hero.

(4 Inqs/2 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Clone Commander Lee Talk 19:52, April 26, 2014 (UTC)
  2. 501st dogma(talk) 14:52, July 10, 2014 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 03:03, July 14, 2014 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 01:10, July 20, 2014 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 15:44, August 9, 2014 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote 1358 (Talk) 20:33, October 4, 2014 (UTC)

Object

Lee's charge
  • Infobox: Double-linking. Sorry for not fixing it myself, but maybe you want to add the Republic Navy as you mention it prominently in the intro?
  • Intro: A date would be great.
  • This article is a "battle" right? Why are there "combatants" fields empty?
  • Intro: The Hero had foiled the Emperor's recent attempts of the Emperor's agents to massacre thousands on the planets Belsavis, Voss, and Corellia, a sacrifice which was necessary to start the Emperor's dark side ritual to consume all life in the galaxy, and the Jedi hoped to kill the Emperor before he could complete his plans. : Too many Emperors IMHO. Please find a way to substitute one/two of them.
  • Prelude: Can you source 3642 BBY to Annihilation?
    • Yeah, it states that war started two years earlier. Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 19:42, April 26, 2014 (UTC)
  • The operation: If you mention Rusk's and Carsen's first name, please also give us Kimble's.
  • The operation: but the Sith ruler unleashed an explosive blast of Force lightning that threw his enemy across the room. Acknowledging the Hero's strength in the Force, the Emperor unleashed a blast of Force lightning directed straight at the Jedi: Two times "unleash/blast force lightning": Please change one.
  • Political stuff: All of the group except for Lord Scourge received the Cross of Glory, the Republic's highest honor, and Shan elevated the Hero to the rank of Jedi Master.: Wait, Scourge did not receive the Cross? His article and the article on the Cross itself say otherwise.
    • Fixed.
  • No images for the body?
  • The galaxy at large: Incredibly powerful in the Force, the Dread Masters found that none in the Empire were powerful enough to command their loyalty: Is incredibly said in the game or POV?
    • Yeah, they're established as such.
  • BtS: Is there any more stuff known regarding whom you rescue. A quote would be nice.
  • I changed the a link in the "Appearances" section, please tell me if you're fine with it.
    • Per the recent CT, Star Wars: has been dropped from the title. Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 19:42, April 26, 2014 (UTC)
  • Great job, to be honest, I expected nothing less. Clone Commander Lee Talk 12:11, April 26, 2014 (UTC)
    • All done. Thanks. Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:56, April 26, 2014 (UTC)
Cade FANoms need some love
  • Context for Dromund Kaas in the Prelude?
    • Already has context. I'm not giving the bolded Dromund Kaas context, if that's what you're asking.
      • Prelude, not intro. It's not clear what it is now (Planet, moon, space station....) 501st dogma(talk) 14:48, July 10, 2014 (UTC)
  • "I will not be contained I cannot be redeemed. Death is all that remains, and you will not kill me." Are you missing punctuation in the first part of the quote here? A comma perhaps?
    • Period.
  • "...thus, the committee's conclusion was that the Emperor was in fact dead. Thus, in the aftermath of the..." Kill a thus pls.
    • Done.
  • "freeze the oceans of Manaan" and "set fire to Ord Mantell."" Context for the two worlds here would be nice.
    • They're direct quotes, so I'm not going to modify them, and it's awkward every other way, so no. Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 14:32, July 10, 2014 (UTC)
  • As an aside, the Emperor's Ritual crisis infobox has a </td at the bottom for some reason. :P Good work. 501st dogma(talk) 21:21, July 9, 2014 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 20:33, October 4, 2014 (UTC)