Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Denetrus

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Denetrus

(5 Inqs/3 Users/8 Total)

Support

  1. Jorrel Wiki-shrinkable Fraajic 22:48, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote An interesting Watson character? I am shocked and chagrined! Thefourdotelipsis 23:44, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
  3. POWER!!! Unlimited POWER! Chack Jadson (Talk) 00:47, 6 November 2007 (UTC)
  4. -- AdmirableAckbar [Talk] 11:54, 9 November 2007 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Lovely. Now FINISH WARU! -- Darth Culator (Talk) 03:32, 10 November 2007 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Wait a second...this ISN'T Waru!? Greyman(Paratus) 18:25, 15 November 2007 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote Green Tentacle (Talk) 20:56, 19 November 2007 (UTC)
  8. Inqvote My only objections are to Watson's naming conventions.—Graestan(This party's over) 16:23, 28 November 2007 (UTC)

Oppose

  1. A few really minor things:
    • Perhaps a bit of explanation as to who Xanatos is before he is introduced.
      • You mean a eerily similar individual who is, surprise surprise, somewhat Dookuish? And that both dealt with Qui-Gon? Oh, by the way, expanded.
    • In Ending the games, two sentences in a row start with As Xanatos... Perhaps one could be rephrased.
      • Rephrased.
    • I noticed two instances of numbers being written in digits (3, 100), as opposed to spelled out. There may not be more, but I'd like all these turned to three, one hundred etc.
      • Numeral designations removed.
      • That's all. Good article, easy to read; I demand you keep up this FA writing. Well done. -- AdmirableAckbar [Talk] 16:55, 8 November 2007 (UTC)
  2. From the desk of Dr. Fred Edison Green Tentacle:
    • Intro: "There, he worked for various companies, including UniFy, each hiring and subsequently firing him because of his abilities." Could do with being reworded slightly so it doesn't imply his abilities get him fired.
      • Reworded.
    • Telosian Security Forces or Telosian security forces? There's one of each. If it's actually a name, it should be linked too.
      • Lowercase.
    • The POWER Party: "Den showed that he was capable of insightful insight." Insightful insight eh? That's pretty insightful. :P
      • I did that on purpose. I can't believe it survived this far.
    • Clarify what was actually happening on Telos and UniFy's involvement a little.
      • Clarified.
    • Infiltrating UniFy: Xanatos's introduction in the second paragraph could do with being a little clearer.
      • Expanded/clarified.
    • Bringing down Xanatos, UniFy, and Katharsis: "His celebration was cut short, however, as Xanatos had entered the arena to give his customary speech which concluded the event and precluded the awarding ceremonies." Should that be precluded or preceded?
      • Preceded.
    • Ending the games: What exactly had Obi-Wan recorded?
      • Explained.
    • Reunion with Obi-Wan Kenobi: "After accomplishing that task with a lock-pick device he fashioned, the three decided that an investigation of Vox Chun's room." That sentence doesn't seem to have an ending.
      • Ended.
    • Saving the BioCruiser: "Vox eventually told the four gathered with him the plan." Which was?
      • To destroy the ship and steal the treasury. What else?
    • Saving the BioCruiser: "Den stayed behind as the three Jedi made their way to Uni." Obi-Wan, Anakin and who?
      • While it was explained the in the last paragraph's last sentence, I clarified here, too.
    • Saving the BioCruiser: I assume the mention of Qui-Gon should be Obi-Wan?
      • You assume correctly.
    • Green Tentacle (Talk) 23:57, 18 November 2007 (UTC)
      • Objections addressed. Jorrel Wiki-shrinkable Fraajic 16:20, 19 November 2007 (UTC)

Comments

Approved by Inquisitorius 19:07, 28 November 2007 (UTC)

  1. History. Jorrel Wiki-shrinkable Fraajic 22:48, 5 November 2007 (UTC)