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Decimator (war machine)
- Nominated by: Atarumaster88
(Talk page) 20:59, June 15, 2010 (UTC) - Nomination comments: It's about 1100 words; relatively short.
(4 Inqs/2 Users/6 Total)
Support
- Getting those endless John Williams looped tracks in my head again... Thefourdotelipsis 00:19, June 19, 2010 (UTC)
- Imperialles 08:11, June 19, 2010 (UTC)
Xicer9
(Combadge) 19:37, June 20, 2010 (UTC)
Green Tentacle (Talk) 13:14, June 26, 2010 (UTC)- —Tommy 9281 21:48, June 27, 2010 (UTC)
- CC7567 (talk) 23:56, June 27, 2010 (UTC)
Object
L'Imperialles
Infobox: Two unsourced fields.- Intro: "end Tann's reign of terror" POV.
- History: "with the assistance of the Wookiees" Last I checked, Kashyyyk was a member of the Republic. This sentence sort of implies they're a third party.
- History: "Be'Daay was discovered by the Wookiees before he could divulge further information" What Wookiees? Be more specific.
History: "Tann then obtained the location of the Decimator manufacturing center" Where did she get the information from? Not really an objection, more of an inquiry. It seems to pop up from nowhere, but it might be presented that way in the game itself.- She gets it from the Decimator Laboratory also and I have clarified that in the article. Atarumaster88 (Talk page) 23:44, June 18, 2010 (UTC)
- She gets it from the Decimator Laboratory also and I have clarified that in the article. Atarumaster88
History: Excessive usage of "then." Listing the sentences affected to illustrate the issue: "Tann then obtained the location of the Decimator manufacturing center"; "Tann then destroyed the Decimator facilities"; "Tann then used at least two of them"; "The Separatists then established a new Decimator facility on Krant"; "Shen-Jon then took his Republic army to Krant"- Good catch, knocked out 3 of them. Atarumaster88 (Talk page) 23:44, June 18, 2010 (UTC)
- Good catch, knocked out 3 of them. Atarumaster88
BTS: Do we have an article for the "Heavy Assault Mech"? If so, link away.- We do not, nor to "Assault Mech" Atarumaster88 (Talk page) 23:44, June 18, 2010 (UTC)
- We do not, nor to "Assault Mech" Atarumaster88
- Good work. Haven't seen a land vehicle FAN in quite some time. --Imperialles 19:25, June 17, 2010 (UTC)
- Thanks. Everything else fixed up as well; I'm a little out of practice, so a few more slip-ups than I would have preferred. Atarumaster88 (Talk page) 23:44, June 18, 2010 (UTC)
- Thanks. Everything else fixed up as well; I'm a little out of practice, so a few more slip-ups than I would have preferred. Atarumaster88
I will not eat the pissy biscuit
"could stand up" - Isn't that a little colloquial for you, Ataru? :P- See above for "out of practice." :P I'm rustier than the Kinzua Bridge, but fixed. Atarumaster88 (Talk page) 23:44, June 18, 2010 (UTC)
- See above for "out of practice." :P I'm rustier than the Kinzua Bridge, but fixed. Atarumaster88
Loathe as I am to make context complaints, ooo iz zis Count Dooku you speak of?- I think Count Dooku is a pretty cool guy. eh fights Jedi and doesn't afraid of anything. Atarumaster88 (Talk page) 23:44, June 18, 2010 (UTC)
- I think Count Dooku is a pretty cool guy. eh fights Jedi and doesn't afraid of anything. Atarumaster88
- Actually, that's all. Nice work, and it's great to see more GB love. Thefourdotelipsis 01:27, June 18, 2010 (UTC)
- Thanks for reviewing. :) Atarumaster88 (Talk page) 23:45, June 18, 2010 (UTC)
- Thanks for reviewing. :) Atarumaster88
Xicer
In the second paragraph of Characteristics, you said it had multiple turbolasers, but in the infobox and the rest of the article you indicate that it only has one. Which is it?You call Shen-Jon a Jedi Master in the intro, but you call him a Knight in the body. Which is he?- Master, although that's semantic given that Jedi are often referred to as "Knights" in canon despite ranking as a Master. (See TPM for examples) At any rate, changed to Master.
In the intro and infobox, you mention its ability to ferry infantry around the battlefield, but you don't mention this fact in either the Characteristics or Role sections.- Otherwise, nice. I added a bunch of missing infobox parameters in my copy-edit. Please see if any of them need filling. Xicer9(Combadge) 02:11, June 20, 2010 (UTC)
- All done. Atarumaster88 (Talk page) 19:32, June 20, 2010 (UTC)
- All done. Atarumaster88
Eyrezer
Quick clarification: "and the Decimators saw no further action in the Clone Wars." Is this actually said, or is it based on the fact we never see them again? --Eyrezer 05:11, June 23, 2010 (UTC)- The relevant quote is from the NEC, page 55 in my version: "Although the Separatists had lost their stolen Decimators…" In the final mission where you fight them, you do a lot of destroying Decimators and their facilities, but no capturing at all. The Republic doesn't have them after Tann seizes them and the NEC explicitly states that the Separatists lost theirs. Atarumaster88 (Talk page) 18:51, June 25, 2010 (UTC)
- The relevant quote is from the NEC, page 55 in my version: "Although the Separatists had lost their stolen Decimators…" In the final mission where you fight them, you do a lot of destroying Decimators and their facilities, but no capturing at all. The Republic doesn't have them after Tann seizes them and the NEC explicitly states that the Separatists lost theirs. Atarumaster88
- As you said in your comments, it does need some more images. That's all from me. Otherwise, nicely done. --Eyrezer 04:54, June 24, 2010 (UTC)
Green Tentacle
The into mentions the weapon as a composite-beam laser but it's only turbolasers are mentioned in characteristics and the infobox. And is it just one or more? It's singular in most places but the "giant turbolaser cannons" quote is plural.- The composite-beam thing in the intro was a holdover of the original text; I didn't check the piped-link before. It's been changed to turbolaser. As for the weapons thing, I'd say it's just one weapon. However, the source for the plural thing is from NEC, page 55. "The weapons—tanks with giant turbolaser cannons mounted atop—proved stunningly effective." In-game, you only ever see one beam firing at a time, but I left the wording intentionally vague since there is some possible confusion in NEC. I can tighten it down so that it's listed as explicitly a single weapon if you wish but I wasn't comfortable doing so. Atarumaster88 (Talk page) 19:01, June 25, 2010 (UTC)
- Leave it vague and note the possible discrepancy in BTS? Green Tentacle (Talk) 22:37, June 25, 2010 (UTC)
- Sure. Atarumaster88 (Talk page) 02:27, June 26, 2010 (UTC)
- Sure. Atarumaster88
- Leave it vague and note the possible discrepancy in BTS? Green Tentacle (Talk) 22:37, June 25, 2010 (UTC)
- The composite-beam thing in the intro was a holdover of the original text; I didn't check the piped-link before. It's been changed to turbolaser. As for the weapons thing, I'd say it's just one weapon. However, the source for the plural thing is from NEC, page 55. "The weapons—tanks with giant turbolaser cannons mounted atop—proved stunningly effective." In-game, you only ever see one beam firing at a time, but I left the wording intentionally vague since there is some possible confusion in NEC. I can tighten it down so that it's listed as explicitly a single weapon if you wish but I wasn't comfortable doing so. Atarumaster88
You mention the presence of shields, thick armor and the space for infantry inside in a couple of places, but not in characteristics. Should be in there. You can still repeat it elsewhere if relevant.- The Imperial Redundancy Department of Redundancy approves, I suppose. Worked in. Atarumaster88 (Talk page) 19:01, June 25, 2010 (UTC)
- The Imperial Redundancy Department of Redundancy approves, I suppose. Worked in. Atarumaster88
Can you work the 22 BBY date from the infobox into the history section. Around the reference to Geonosis would make sense.- Fixed. Atarumaster88 (Talk page) 19:01, June 25, 2010 (UTC)
- Fixed. Atarumaster88
What is the "Heavy Assault Mech" in BTS and should it link to anything? Green Tentacle (Talk) 14:29, June 24, 2010 (UTC)- It's an in-game classification of a particular unit class representing the strongest Mech-type units. In-universe, I tend to think it's useless since it lumps the AT-TE, AT-AT, MTT, and a number of other clearly unrelated vehicles into the same category. If that term contains too much game mechanic stuff, I can remove it. Atarumaster88 (Talk page) 19:01, June 25, 2010 (UTC)
- Something less capitalized would probably be better, or mention examples. Keeps people who aren't familiar with the game from searching for something we don't have an article on. Green Tentacle (Talk) 22:37, June 25, 2010 (UTC)
- De-capitalized. I'm loathe to make direct comparisons simply because Galactic Battlegrounds game mechanics have very little relation to actual canon. Atarumaster88 (Talk page) 02:27, June 26, 2010 (UTC)
- De-capitalized. I'm loathe to make direct comparisons simply because Galactic Battlegrounds game mechanics have very little relation to actual canon. Atarumaster88
- Something less capitalized would probably be better, or mention examples. Keeps people who aren't familiar with the game from searching for something we don't have an article on. Green Tentacle (Talk) 22:37, June 25, 2010 (UTC)
- It's an in-game classification of a particular unit class representing the strongest Mech-type units. In-universe, I tend to think it's useless since it lumps the AT-TE, AT-AT, MTT, and a number of other clearly unrelated vehicles into the same category. If that term contains too much game mechanic stuff, I can remove it. Atarumaster88
Comments
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 23:56, June 27, 2010 (UTC)
- Could use some more images; I'll need to ask about getting some extracted from SWGB. Let me know if it's too loaded with game mechanics. Atarumaster88 (Talk page) 20:59, June 15, 2010 (UTC)