Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Corv

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Corv

  • Nominated by: Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 21:54, 28 December 2022 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Quite enjoyed this side character.
  • Date Archived: 15:29, 13 July 2023 (UTC)
  • Final word count: 2247 words (289 introduction, 1853 body, 105 behind the scenes)
  • Word count at nomination time: 2307 words (390 introduction, 1849 body, 68 behind the scenes)
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(4 Inqs/2 Users/6 Total)

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Support

  1. Inqvote Of courve! JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 03:13, 13 June 2023 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote copy-edit; other points handled via Discord —spookywillowwtalk 23:31, 16 June 2023 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Lewisr (talk) 16:57, 3 July 2023 (UTC)
  4. Chipchip88 (talk) 18:10, 3 July 2023 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Commander Code-8 Hello There! 10:48, 13 July 2023 (UTC)
  6. TomotronSith Quad-SunSith Council 10:52, 13 July 2023 (UTC)

Object

AxMech
  • Amazing character choise! (review note)
    • My personal favourite of the side characters so far, I must admit.
  • Preliminary notes: Syril Karn was a Deputy Inspector of the Pre-Mor, it should be specified instead of the more generic "lawman" or the incorrect "corpo"
    • Done for the bio. Don't think the intro needs to be massively specific.
      • At the very least change it to "Pre-Mor officer" or something like that. The Pre-Mor Enforcement was tactical forces anyway, more akin to an army than a police unit.
        • His role was in the inspection team, was it not? I feel like lawman or police officer is a fine enough way to put it in this case. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 10:44, 29 December 2022 (UTC)
          • In Narkina 5 it is clarified that he is a DI stationed in the Corporate Security Headquarters. He accompanies the Security Inspection Team led by Mosk solely for the duration of the mission to arrest Cassian. Take a look at the Pre-Mor related pages and adjust the info accordingly. AxMech (talk) 15:21, 29 December 2022 (UTC)
            • I think there's a mistake there. Per Episode two, we know Mosk's unit is the Corporate Tactical Forces (Star Wars version of a SWAT team), and per Episode 1, we know Karn is part of the Pre-Mor Inspection team. His job was very much looking into crimes and the army style part came from the sentiment of Mosk's folk to play soldier, which the DI was happy to allow. I don't see why it's wrong to just call him a lawman. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 17:50, 29 December 2022 (UTC)
              • It's your article so if you don't want to change it that's fair, but what you're saying is wrong based on all the Preox-Morlana related wook pages we currently have. I cannot support this nom as it is right now. AxMech (talk) 10:05, 30 December 2022 (UTC)
  • 99% sure that a member of the Andor crew confirmed on Twitter that Bix confirmed Anto Kreegyr was Axis, you should change that part to reflect that
    • Rix Road talks about Meero still wanting to find Axis, so it's evident that the interview did not work. I'd rather take that implication over someone's tweet.
  • There's a lot of very specific details on the intro that are better suited for the Biography. For example, the entire section of Corv watching over the Andor residence is repeated almost word for word in the article body -it should be a sentence max in the intro. Also stuff like Corv going for a walk with Dedra. Also lacking information other than his biography such as character traits or appearance
    • I'm unsure what the problem is here. The sentences expand on the events a lot more deeply in the bio than in the intro. I always write the intro last as a summary of what's in the bio.
      • Even despite that, the intro is still missing non-biographical info. At least a sentence if not a short paragraph should be dedicated to that.
        • Besides species and gender, non-bio info isn't needed in the intro if the article is expanded into sections (See examples in WP:FA). Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 10:44, 29 December 2022 (UTC)
  • There's a lot of missing links, with a very quick look I found "Morlani system", Supervisor for Flob, Imperial Bureau of Standards Coruscant office for the first mention of the building in the Biography, and Doctor for Mullmoy.
    • Implemented other ones. I removed the Doctor pipelink before Mullmoy earlier, though, as it's already used for Gorst.
      • There's still a couple missing links that although not directly relevant should be filled. Blast door, death, and City are some, but others like Funerary stone are important IU things that should be linked to the article.
  • There's a couple spelling and grammar mistakes that might need fixing- I did a quick copy-edit on the intro but there's some on the body as well AxMech (talk) 22:40, 28 December 2022 (UTC)
    • Everything seems to flow fine for me but that's more just my writing style, which others can alter in copy-edits if they want. If I've missed any proper bad mistakes though that's on me. Also watch out for grammer mistakes of your own when copy-editing (talking about the missing comma here). Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 00:10, 29 December 2022 (UTC)
      • The first paragraph of "Opportunities" as well as the first sentence of "unpredicted changes" and "plan gone awry" need to be reworded as they read poorly now. Mistakes in my own copy-edits are irrelevant to your FAN so please note any in the edit description or, if something particularly concerns you, leave a message in my talk page. AxMech (talk) 01:02, 29 December 2022 (UTC)
        • I've made tweaks to the sentences where I feel they can be made. Feel free to adjust in a copy-edit if you still feel they read badly. As for my grammer comment, I felt that served better here as it was regarding changes made to the article in review. I'd rather not have to branch the conversations elsewhere. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 10:44, 29 December 2022 (UTC)
          • Noting that I have performed an article-wide copy-edit. AxMech (talk) 15:21, 29 December 2022 (UTC)
Macaroni
Chipchip88
  • For the BTS, maybe mention how the original image asset was deleted by Getty Images after being released. Chipchip88 (talk) 18:58, 23 June 2023 (UTC)
CC-8
  • Although it's kind of fun to leave it pipelinked to maintain the Imperial's perspective, the body at least should spell out that Luthen Rael was Axis
  • I think an article for the cafe is warranted Commander Code-8 Hello There! 11:22, 10 July 2023 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 10:57, 13 July 2023 (UTC)