- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Coruscant Security Force
- Nominated by: Coruscantfan (Talk) 22:04, June 25, 2015 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Déjà vu... although this version is blessedly shorter.
(3 Inqs/4 Users/7 Total)
Support
Supreme Emperor (talk) 14:27, April 16, 2016 (UTC)- Great job. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 00:46, April 25, 2016 (UTC)
- AV-6R7Crew Pit 12:56, April 25, 2016 (UTC)
- IFYLOFD (Talk) 06:26, June 22, 2016 (UTC)
- -- Darth Culator (Talk) 23:59, July 21, 2016 (UTC)
- User:The Brave Goldfish (User talk:The Brave Goldfish) 21:13, October 16, 2016 (EET)
- ProfessorTofty (talk) 02:28, October 19, 2016 (UTC)
Object
Cubert
Awesome! But shouldn't AotC be marked as "(First mentioned; albeit indirectly)"? I'll read through it fully soon. Nivlacanator(talk) 04:17, July 10, 2015 (UTC)- Change made. Coruscantfan (Talk) 05:46, July 11, 2015 (UTC)
AV-6R7
Can you add a subsection on Phoca Soot to the Members section?- AV-6R7Crew Pit 17:37, April 16, 2016 (UTC)- Done. Coruscantfan (Talk) 12:23, April 25, 2016 (UTC)
Floyd
My first impression is that the intro is rather unwieldy for an article of this size. You don't need four paragraphs—you can probably condense the most important stuff into two, maybe three at the most. The history part of the intro could at least be heavily, heavily streamlined. I'll take another look after this is done.IFYLOFD (Talk) 05:04, May 26, 2016 (UTC)- I've trimmed down the history section of the intro which is now 3 paragraphs. Let me know if I need to condense further. Coruscantfan (Talk) 12:21, June 13, 2016 (UTC)
Culator
- OMG, the typos. This isn't an objection, since I fixed them, but they should be noted for your edification: along side -> alongside, exectuing -> executing, occured -> occurred, specfically -> specifically, manged -> managed, twelve year old son -> twelve-year-old son, self defense -> self-defense, familier -> familiar, Crayer -> Cryar (multiple), Mandalorains -> Mandalorians, Robonion -> Robonino (this is my favorite one), Santiago -> Santigo
- Thanks.
One thing I didn't fix: In the first paragraph of "Mandalorian Intrigue," you say Golec gave Kryze a "datadisc" but in the third paragraph you exclusively refer to a "holodisc" without explanation. If these are the same item, the term should be standardized. -- Darth Culator (Talk) 12:39, July 16, 2016 (UTC)- Done. Coruscantfan (Talk) 18:05, July 20, 2016 (UTC)
ProfessorTofty
I've found and linked two things that ought to have been - color and fireworks. Because of this, I'm going to ask that you do a sweepthrough of the article and see if you can find anything else that ought to be linked. Otherwise, looking good. ProfessorTofty (talk) 16:06, September 23, 2016 (UTC)
- Done. Coruscantfan (Talk) 08:38, October 18, 2016 (UTC)
- Fantastic! Glad you're back - was getting worried this was going to get closed out because of your absence. You have my vote - so it looks like this one is yours. ProfessorTofty (talk) 02:28, October 19, 2016 (UTC)
Comments
- The Coruscant model of police droid are named Guardian police droids as in legends per Star Wars: Absolutely Everything You Need to Know. I've fixed the redirects on all other pages, but since the redirects will required some sentences to be reworded on this article I thought I'd leave the changes to you instead of messing around with your FAN. Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:13, October 27, 2015 (UTC)
- Thanks. Coruscantfan (Talk) 08:04, November 10, 2015 (UTC)
- Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 04:12, October 19, 2016 (UTC)