Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Confrontation in the Caverns of the Hidden One

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Confrontation in the Caverns of the Hidden One

Nominated by: —MJ— _{War Room} 04:21, April 6, 2013 (UTC)
Nomination comments: Another existing GA by Jujiggum. This will probably be the last one from me, at least for a while. WP:NOVELS, WP:LE, etc.

IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 23:28, April 8, 2013 (UTC)
Supreme Emperor (talk) 03:11, April 12, 2013 (UTC)
Sir Cavalier of One^{(Squadron channel)} 14:58, April 23, 2013 (UTC)
The number of subsections seems a little unnecessary, but whatever. Cade Calrayn 23:41, June 6, 2013 (UTC)
Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 23:50, June 13, 2013 (UTC)
CC7567 ^(talk) 03:41, June 15, 2013 (UTC)

~~You have the entire Prelude in a single subsection. Is that really necessary? Do we need a subsection at all?~~ IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 02:36, April 8, 2013 (UTC)
- Extraneous header axed. —MJ— _{War Room} 02:38, April 8, 2013 (UTC)

~~In the intro, could you have the date and location in the first sentence?~~
- Moving the date was easy, but less so for the location. After looking at it for a couple minutes, I don't see a graceful way to get the location into the first sentence while at the same time retaining the names of the combatants and necessary context without turning it into a run-on sentence. So the location has been left in the second sentence; if you have a suggestion on how to work it into the first sentence, I'm all ears. —MJ— _{War Room} 00:20, April 12, 2013 (UTC)
  - Actually that looks good with just the date in the first line.
I shall continue tomorrow. Supreme Emperor (talk) 03:10, April 11, 2013 (UTC)
~~Can you add in the novels release date in the behind the scenes?~~ Supreme Emperor (talk) 01:11, April 12, 2013 (UTC)
- Done. —MJ— ^Holocomm 03:09, April 12, 2013 (UTC)

Quote attribution: "Charsae Saal to Koro Ziil" - should this be amended to "Chara to the Hidden One" since these were the identities they had adopted at the time? Also, should Ziil be refered to as such at all? Should he be "the Hidden One" in his references (this goes for the other articles on this subject you have nommed). - Sir Cavalier of One^{(Squadron channel)} 10:34, April 11, 2013 (UTC)
- Quote attribution changed, but I'm leaving the rest of the references to "Ziil" unchanged. Using both "the Hidden One" and "the Hidden Ones" many times in close proximity would get too confusing; additionally, Luke and Ben never refer to him as the Hidden One anyway, only as Koro Ziil, and so it can be argued that both names were "in use". That said, "the Hidden One" is used a few times in the confrontation section where the action focuses heavily on Ziil to minimize repetition, so it's not completely unrepresented. —MJ— _{War Room} 00:20, April 12, 2013 (UTC)

This is kind of a needling objection, but I prefer to see the references be consistent in their use of page numbers. Meaning, if one reference decides to cite page numbers, I think they should all do so for consistency. I realize citing page numbers for novels can be difficult based on different versions, so perhaps just citing chapters for these two novels would be best. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 20:55, June 13, 2013 (UTC)
- I went the other way with it and eliminated the ERC page number. Is that OK? The ERC's chronological layout is intuitive enough that one should be able to easily find the Outcast entry without needing to be given the page number. —MJ— ^Holocomm 23:42, June 13, 2013 (UTC)
  - Absolutely. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 23:50, June 13, 2013 (UTC)

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 03:41, June 15, 2013 (UTC)