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Cohbo'rik'ardok
- Nominated by: BloodOfIrizi
(Syndicure) 18:15, 3 April 2023 (UTC) - Nomination comments: the crown jewel of my Cohbo family nominations
- Date Archived: 17:18, 1 September 2023 (UTC)
- Final word count: 1543 words (260 introduction, 1230 body, 53 behind the scenes)
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Support
JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 19:23, 24 April 2023 (UTC)
WP:CHISS shall continue its invasion of the FAN. Samonic(Vote struck, reason: Per policy: Blocked user -- Imperators II(Talk) 10:05, 10 May 2023 (UTC))
(Talk) 17:24, 3 May 2023 (UTC)
Sorted objections via copy-edit mostly.—spookywillowwtalk 04:02, 1 August 2023 (UTC)- Lewisr (talk) 04:06, 1 August 2023 (UTC)
- TomotronSith Council 09:53, 5 August 2023 (UTC)
- I hope NuCanon eventually does more with the Chiss Ascendancy and the world Zahn created Fan26 (Talk) 15:41, 15 August 2023 (UTC)
- Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 01:03, 30 August 2023 (UTC)
- Booply (talk) 17:16, 1 September 2023 (UTC)
Object
Samonic
- Review note: Excellent, excellent work. I copy-edited the article during my read-throughs, you should probably check my edits.
"Thrawn Ascendancy: Chaos Rising establishes that Borika was 2 years older than Thrawn, placing her year of birth to 61 BBY." — You can just say "placing her birth in 61 BBY" or something like that. I'd also merge that reference with the other one about the year when Borika became a sky-walker.The BtS doesn't need to mention all her alternate names, just "Cohbo'rik'ardok" and "Borika."Samonic (Talk) 15:10, 20 April 2023 (UTC)
- donezo BloodOfIrizi (Syndicure) 17:21, 20 April 2023 (UTC)
- donezo BloodOfIrizi
Macaroni
I'm not sure the Mitth symbol is really necessary in P+T - it's not directly relevant to Borika and comes right after a different logo so it doesn't add too much.- sure, removed
- Review note: take a look at my copy-edit for a bunch of minor fixes. I implemented parentheses for core names as it seems you're trying to present them as parentheticals, which can't just be done by themselves next to the full name. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 01:22, 24 April 2023 (UTC)
- noted, much thanks. I think the parentheses are the best way to list core names going forward tbh, ill bring it up with the others BloodOfIrizi (Syndicure) 03:19, 24 April 2023 (UTC)
- Agreed. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 19:23, 24 April 2023 (UTC)
- noted, much thanks. I think the parentheses are the best way to list core names going forward tbh, ill bring it up with the others BloodOfIrizi
Anil
The Kivu family being "minor" is exclusive to the intro.Context for Csilla is required in the article body.- Fixed Lewisr (talk) 20:25, 29 August 2023 (UTC)
- I think the context itself is sufficient now, but documenting Csilla's status as capital in the intro but not in the body is not really ideal. I know it's kinda a so-fix-it thing, but I'm not sure if it'd require an additional reference. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 22:22, 29 August 2023 (UTC)
- I think the context itself is sufficient now, but documenting Csilla's status as capital in the intro but not in the body is not really ideal. I know it's kinda a so-fix-it thing, but I'm not sure if it'd require an additional reference.
- Fixed Lewisr (talk) 20:25, 29 August 2023 (UTC)
I think the second half of the Biography section in particular can be restructured more chronologically. Like, for example, Thalias' reason to visit the Ardok Ranch should be mentioned earlier in the article, not when she reveals it to Borika. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 19:47, 29 August 2023 (UTC)
- Looking at the way it's presented in the book, I think the current structuring is okay the way it is and accurate to how the book goes/reveals things. Moving the reason for the visit doesn't seem like the best course, as it would require a lot of restructuring that imo isn't necessary Lewisr (talk) 20:33, 29 August 2023 (UTC)
- It indeed is accurate to how the book reveals it, but that's my point. It partially looks like the transcription of the novel passages rather than chronological documentation of the events of the book. I don't think the chronological order of things needs to be very strict to improve the overall readability, but revealing why Thalias visited Borika in the first place almost after the visit itself, for example, is a bit too much in my opinion. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 22:22, 29 August 2023 (UTC)
- Resolved via Discord. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 01:03, 30 August 2023 (UTC)
- It indeed is accurate to how the book reveals it, but that's my point. It partially looks like the transcription of the novel passages rather than chronological documentation of the events of the book. I don't think the chronological order of things needs to be very strict to improve the overall readability, but revealing why Thalias visited Borika in the first place almost after the visit itself, for example, is a bit too much in my opinion.
- Looking at the way it's presented in the book, I think the current structuring is okay the way it is and accurate to how the book goes/reveals things. Moving the reason for the visit doesn't seem like the best course, as it would require a lot of restructuring that imo isn't necessary Lewisr (talk) 20:33, 29 August 2023 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 17:17, 1 September 2023 (UTC)