Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Cham Syndulla/Legends

< Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations
The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.

Cham Syndulla

  • Nominated by: CC7567 (talk) 22:29, 7 August 2009 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Another old GA. Finally had the time to rewrite it from its rather poor state.

(5 Inqs/2 Users/7 Total)

Support

  1. Inqvote I hear you liek clone warz! Chack Jadson (Talk) 23:35, 8 August 2009 (UTC)
  2. Exelent.Kreivi Wolter 20:09, 11 August 2009 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Grunny (Talk) 03:42, October 1, 2009 (UTC)
  4. Good work.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 13:46, October 21, 2009 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Nice work. --Eyrezer 03:32, November 1, 2009 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote — Fiolli {Alpheridies University ComNet} 16:29, November 27, 2009 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 16:31, November 27, 2009 (UTC)

Object

  1. Blah
    • "Syndulla did not not onto his personal disputes with Taa" Err...what? :P You're missing a word.
    • "because of later changes due to a lack of sense in the plot" So, they changed it because the plot made no sense? Could you rephrase this a bit? It's a touch...odd, and POVish.
    • Real nice work, CC. Chack Jadson (Talk) 15:35, 8 August 2009 (UTC)
      • Thanks for the review, Chack. Just a note: I've replaced the Palpatine link in the quote caption because it's the only time he's in the article. If there's a problem with that, I'll try to catch you on IRC later. CC7567 (talk) 17:43, 8 August 2009 (UTC)
  2. Grunny:
    • One minor thing: "Syndulla did not not onto his personal disputes with Taa if doing so meant the loss of his people's lives or freedom." First part of the sentence doesn't make sense, and I'm not exactly sure what you wanted to say or I would have fixed it myself :).
      • Huh. I could've sworn I put "hold". Anyway, fixed.
    • Just a note, you seem to be using "preceding" to refer to something that follows, when it means something which came before. Otherwise an excellent read :-). Grunny (Talk) 14:38, September 30, 2009 (UTC)
      • And my "extensive vocabulary" goes out the window. Thanks for the review, Grunny. CC7567 (talk) 16:36, September 30, 2009 (UTC)
  3. Eyrezer:
    • "Picking up a young Twi'lek girl, Syndulla discovered that Glie had injured himself, and the freedom fighters' leader told his friend that he needed him. Even though their supplies were short, and despite his misgivings about the Republic, Syndulla expressed the Twi'lek tradition of hospitality and offered Windu food and beverage." This seems a bit odd to me. Is the bit telling Glie that he needed him meant to relate to the hospitality? Can you reword this?
      • They aren't necessarily related, so I've done some rewording. Hopefully that will solve the problem. CC7567 (talk) 16:09, October 28, 2009 (UTC)
    • You should probably add Cham's blurrg riding ability in his P&T. --Eyrezer 11:02, October 28, 2009 (UTC)
      • Bah, forgot that. Thanks for the review. CC7567 (talk) 16:09, October 28, 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 16:31, November 27, 2009 (UTC)