Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Cal Omas

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Cal Omas

(6 Inq/1 User/7 total)

Support

  1. Inqvote The Dude. Thefourdotelipsis 12:03, 25 August 2007 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Greyman(Paratus) 19:14, 1 September 2007 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Spoilerific. Green Tentacle (Talk) 09:55, 3 September 2007 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Atarumaster88 Jedi Order (Talk page) 23:21, 11 September 2007 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Cull Tremayne 07:35, 12 September 2007 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Imperialles 13:18, 15 September 2007 (UTC)
  7. You obnoxious, power-crazed, ludicrous little jerk! This guy has the best quote in the enire LOTF series. Hobbes15(Tiger Headquarters) 15:06, 15 September 2007 (UTC)

Objections

  1. This suggest he may have been in the NJOSB. If not, and this page is original material, it should be added to the sources. --Eyrezer 09:07, 27 August 2007 (UTC)
  2. Luke's referred to as Grand Master before it says he declared himself that. Green Tentacle (Talk) 22:13, 2 September 2007 (UTC)
  • From a desk far, far, away
    • Ridiculously oversized intro. "Proper" lead please: the current one eclipses that of the largest FAs or noms in existence.
      • It's not that much bigger than Jade's. It only looks massive since the infobox is pissantesque. Intro size, provided it's not copious, comes down to authorial preference. I thought that was the best way in which I could summarise Omas. Plus, you'll want to save this objection for the Fel article. Thefourdotelipsis 11:33, 4 September 2007 (UTC)
    • Colloquial diction, as well as somewhat repetitive diction in the Yuuzhan Vong War. Needs a more encyclopediac tone.
      • Could you please cite examples? I'm not challenging you, I'm just a tad simple in the way of complexities in your funky language. Thefourdotelipsis 09:26, 6 September 2007 (UTC)
        • "Loggerheads", "blame" used twice relatively close together in 1st para, "support endorsement" reads awkwardly. I prefer to keep this things as nation-neutral as possible while still using the MoS mandated American English. (Despite the fact that most Americans don't speak English: they speak American.) Atarumaster88 Jedi Order (Talk page) 04:23, 7 September 2007 (UTC)
          • Examples fixed. Keep 'em coming! ;) Unless, of course, you want to do a Havacesque Unresolvable Objection. :P Thefourdotelipsis 12:27, 11 September 2007 (UTC)
            • Good fixes. I'd look kind of silly if I did that, since I was the one who led the charge against those. ;-) Atarumaster88 Jedi Order (Talk page) 17:14, 11 September 2007 (UTC)
    • I'd like a little more detail in the 28 ABY election, and the last sentence of the last paragraph reads strangely.
    • Mention that Omas was willing to use Alpha Red- either in Bio or in P&T.
    • Was Omas present for the liberation of Coruscant, or did he come in afterward? I suspect the latter, but I could be wrong.
    • Corellian counterattack should be linked.
      • It's the same article as the blockade. Thefourdotelipsis 11:31, 4 September 2007 (UTC)
    • Should the fact that Jacen was not Omas's first pick for GAG chief be mentioned? I think so.
      • Though it's kinda by-the-by, I'll mention your precious Jade. Fixed. Thefourdotelipsis 11:36, 5 September 2007 (UTC)
    • Broken reference
    • No info from AOC I
      • And rightly so. He doesn't do anything. Thefourdotelipsis 09:17, 5 September 2007 (UTC)
    • No info from Exile
    • Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88 Jedi Order (Talk page) 00:09, 4 September 2007 (UTC)
    • Possible Inferno spoilers! Really nice work, great to see Omas finally fleshed out, but the last section needs work. The final sentence being about Ben Skywalker doesn't fit - I think he has known Jacen was unstable since Bloodlines - and detracts from the...well, gravitas of the final section. Also, some quotations from that chapter would nice, as well as a better section heading. Have a nice day! --Harrar 18:00, 6 September 2007 (UTC) (struck per Inq meeting)
      • Well, since LOTF hasn't fully resolved itself yet, we don't know whether Omas', well, exuent, will be instrumental in the downfall of Solo. So at the moment, the conclusion has to be a little anticlimactic. Because there is no climax. There was a better section heading, but it kept spoiling people when it popped up in RC. Rest assured, we'll change it when the spoiler period is over. And I'm sure we'll get a few quote in there soon...I haven't actually read the book; got a bit of help on that last section. If you have read the book, could you add a suitable quote? I know you don't have to, but, if you could... :P Thefourdotelipsis 12:17, 11 September 2007 (UTC)
  • Haven't read it fully yet, but could we get a better picture of Horn? I mean, there are much better images than the one there right now. Hobbes15(Tiger Headquarters) 00:09, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
  • From the lair of Hobbes15
    • .Possibly a bit more background on Organa Solo's request that the Ithorians be given Borao
    • In 1.4, "quit his job" reads a little awkwardly. It should be changed to, say, resigned.
    • In the Inferno section, mention that Ben Skywalker never actually believed Omas was responsible for Jade Skywalker's death (unless I read it wrong).
    • I see no spoilers in the BTS. If there aren't any, remove the spoiler tags.
      • Someone removed them. I un-removed them. Thefourdotelipsis 08:01, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
    • As mentioned before, the Horn image could be replaced.
    • Once those are fixed, the article gets my vote simply for this lead quote. :P. Hobbes15(Tiger Headquarters) 01:44, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
    • Found another. At the beginning of The Swarm War, "kicking up a fuss" should be changed!
    • Also, I'd like the two dastardly redlinks to go, but that's just preference. Hobbes15(Tiger Headquarters) 03:59, 15 September 2007 (UTC)
    • Other than the redlinks :( , that's all I found. Yay for spoilers! Hobbes15(Tiger Headquarters) 04:32, 15 September 2007 (UTC)

Comments

  • DAVID WARNERING! HEAVY SPOILERS WITHIN FOR INFERNO! YOU HAVE BEEN ADVISED. Thefourdotelipsis 12:03, 25 August 2007 (UTC)