Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/CT-914

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CT-914

(4 Inqs/2 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Clone Commander Lee Talk 17:31, May 2, 2011 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 18:01, May 26, 2011 (UTC)
  3. Kilson(Let's have a chat) 18:12, June 9, 2011 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Mostly clean. CC7567 (talk) 19:15, June 25, 2011 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Menkooroo 13:59, July 9, 2011 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote He's dead, Jim. Toprawa and Ralltiir 14:22, July 9, 2011 (UTC)

Object

Moffship
  • Excellent work. I just have one objection: In the bio, you mention that CT-915 had been decanted after CT-914, but there's no elaboration. I think some mention of the cloning process would be appropriate here (nothing too much; perhaps a mention of the cloning vats for clarification). Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 00:25, May 22, 2011 (UTC)
Jefferson
  • Can you cut down on the level of detail in the last few paragraphs of the bio? I know that some people aren't fans of the phrase "play-by-play" being thrown around, but "So-and-so inquired," followed by "so-and-so said" followed by "So-and-so informed," or "When Frank asked Sue what she thought, Sue replied that she..." or "Thanking Fred, Bob left the room" stand out as being exactly that. Granted, some lines do have to be recounted, but entire conversations not so much. Some details of specific actions and emotions might be better left to p&t, such as Offee recognizing him through the Force. Give it some thought and let me know.
  • Along the same lines, I'd recommend shortening the last paragraph of the bio. Definitely keep the stuff about Vondar reconsidering his views and then being shocked to find CT-914 dead, but specific details such as him going to visit and then finding the room empty seem a little much. Menkooroo 04:33, July 5, 2011 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 14:22, July 9, 2011 (UTC)