Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Battle of Corellia

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Battle of Corellia

• Nominated by: Cade Calrayn 20:15, April 16, 2014 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Project Hero. It's finally here, after all those damn redlinks.

(4 Inqs/2 Users/6 Total)

Support

1. Reviewed on IRC. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 22:12, April 16, 2014 (UTC)
2. QuiGonJinn ^(Talk) 15:53, October 9, 2014 (UTC)
3. IRC reviewed. IFYLOFD ^{(Enter the Floydome)} 05:10, November 10, 2014 (UTC)
4. -- Darth Culator ^(Talk) 17:28, February 1, 2015 (UTC)
5. Supreme Emperor (talk) 06:01, February 13, 2015 (UTC)
6. Sir Cavalier of One^{(Squadron channel)} 23:47, March 24, 2015 (UTC)

Object

QGJ passing by

• Some inconsistencies related to the Consular story parts I noticed while working on the Barsen'thor page. First of all, the pirates under Captain Valon only join your army if you choose the dark side option to let Valon free on Hoth. The light side option has him taken into custody, and since we assume full light side playthrough for Rep characters this should be changed.
• A minor one, but if you want to, you don't need to source the fact that Bakvalen Hall was the home of Bakarn's family to the Encyclopedia. You can find out about this during the mission, and actually use this info in convo with the First Son.
• The whole part about Nadia leaving for Sarkhai, I'm not sure that ever happens in the game. I know it is listed in the quest description over at various TOR sites, but neither in my light side playthrough, nor in the dark side one I've checked online, the First Son never said anything about a fleet at Sarkhai. Please double-check this.
• I'll try to give it a full review later. QuiGonJinn ^(Talk) 10:59, May 18, 2014 (UTC)
  • All done. Cade Calrayn 19:54, May 18, 2014 (UTC)
• Intro: and members of the former Balmorran resistance Not counting Zenith, Tai Cordan, and the Barsen'thor himself, you can't really say that the Balmorran resistance participated in the battle.
  • Didn't Cordan bring forces with the rest of the Rift Alliance?
    • No, he only brought his droids. QuiGonJinn ^(Talk) 17:09, July 18, 2014 (UTC)
• Linking can be improved quite a bit IMO. I've only gone through the first part of the article and added quite a few links. Stuff like invasion, fleet, shield, and many more, all have articles which can be linked to.
  • Yeah, I went through and rechecked some of the linking. I'll keep combing. Cade Calrayn 18:56, September 13, 2014 (UTC)
• The Bts can be potentially expanded with alternative options in various class missions. For example, in the Trooper story, when you are informed of the apartments being firebombed, you can choose not to save the civilians but rather go steal Imperial dropships while the Empire is occupied there. Later, the Lucky Lancer can be destroyed instead of moved. These are just the ones I'm aware of. QuiGonJinn ^(Talk) 11:22, July 16, 2014 (UTC)
  • I'll look at this over the weekend. Cade Calrayn 17:04, July 18, 2014 (UTC)
    • Okay, I went into some more detail about it; however, as this covers the entire battle, I left out the more specific details that should be reserved for the character/class articles involved. Cade Calrayn 18:56, September 13, 2014 (UTC)
      • Good enough. However, this sentence reads very awkward: The dark side alignment choices, where one's forces are committed to goals such as attacking Imperial medical camps or working for bribes rather than aiding the resistance. Something seems missing here. QuiGonJinn ^(Talk) 11:49, September 19, 2014 (UTC)
        • Fixed. Cade Calrayn 01:19, October 9, 2014 (UTC)

SE

• At the start of the prelude, can you add some context on the Cold War?
  • Done.
• I think you should also add some on the Corellian Council.
  • Done.
• In the Fighting back section, can you add some context on the Hull Cracker?
  • Done.
• "who had infiltrated the resistance, managed to alert other Imperials to the rebels' blind drops" Can you specify what blind drops are?
  • Weirdly, they call them blind drops instead of dead drops. Changed. Cade Calrayn 22:24, January 18, 2015 (UTC)
• Stopped at war begins. Supreme Emperor (talk) 03:56, January 12, 2015 (UTC)
• Stopped at Political intrigue. Supreme Emperor (talk) 05:07, January 27, 2015 (UTC)
• Gaining ground- Can you specify that Ranneth served in the Republic military?
• "The bombing in the Labor Valley" What bombing?
• Stopped at Jedi forces. Supreme Emperor (talk) 05:43, January 30, 2015 (UTC)
  • All done. Cade Calrayn 00:16, February 1, 2015 (UTC)

Culator

• Seriously, the intro is way too big. This is going to go on the main page someday and it's going to look ridiculous. 859 words (depunctuated)/5195 characters (minus wikicode) is insane. -- Darth Culator ^(Talk) 17:55, January 21, 2015 (UTC)
  • 610. Cade Calrayn 00:16, February 1, 2015 (UTC)
    • Well, 619, I don't think your counter is handling punctuation properly, but that's still much better. It doesn't overflow one page at 1280x1024 anymore, which is the metric I was going by. No intro should ever overflow the first page of a 1280x1024 window. http://i.imgur.com/HsyvPuV.png - This is the viewport of a 1280x1050 Chrome window (not 1024, a few pixeis added to account for the revision diff lines). An intro this long is a huge turnoff to the reader and kills the main page. Now your intro is more reasonable. (See, there's a method to my madness... sometimes.) -- Darth Culator ^(Talk) 17:04, February 1, 2015 (UTC)

Exiled Jedi

• The intro seems a little heavy on details of the Republic forces actions rather than the Imperial forces. Do the Imperial classes have significantly less to do with the battle?
• "Around 3642 BBY, the tenuous peace..." Doesn't this date need a special citation?
  • Done. Cade Calrayn 05:34, February 27, 2015 (UTC)
• Done through "Resistance"--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 05:27, February 27, 2015 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 23:47, March 24, 2015 (UTC)