Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Bansu Ro

The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a Featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.

Bansu Ro

• Nominated by: Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 14:33, 17 July 2022 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Returning to my Shadow Wing members effort with a comic/novel crossover character. I'd like to think Ro's family was part of the big crowd at the end of the Liberation of Lothal and he was just some grumpy loyalist that ran away.
• Date Archived: 22:03, 12 July 2023 (UTC)
• Final word count: 2403 words (330 introduction, 2004 body, 69 behind the scenes)
• Word count at nomination time: 2371 words (334 introduction, 1966 body, 71 behind the scenes)
• WookieeProject (optional): WP:AMB, WP:CO, WP:NOVELS

(4 Inqs/2 Users/6 Total)

(Votes required: No additional votes required to pass, please consider reviewing another article.)

Support

1. Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 02:54, 29 April 2023 (UTC)
2. Love me some cross-media characters. UberSoldat93 (talk) 12:51, 15 May 2023 (UTC)
3. copy-edit fun read!—spookywilloww^talk 21:11, 7 June 2023 (UTC)
4. Lewisr (talk) 15:37, 25 June 2023 (UTC)
5. No relation to Marchion Ro Panther436 (talk) 21:18, 5 July 2023 (UTC)
6. Master Fredcerique(talk) (he/him) 22:03, 12 July 2023 (UTC)

Object

Crofyp Ro

• Double hyphens (--) should be changed to emdashes (—) Samonic 20:08, 27 July 2022 (UTC)
  • Very true. Thanks. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 23:06, 27 July 2022 (UTC)
• "Ro and Syrmo joined the 204th's Squadron Five, Squadron commander Teso Broosh which was preparing for an attack on a mobile Rebel Alliance recruitment base." Seems like you missed Broosh when trimming the intro, you removed the rest of the sentence but not the mention of the Squadron commander.
• "He" shouldn't link to gender.
• "In an effort to reach out to the pilots of the 204th, Starfighter Commander Wyl Lark began trying to speak to them over an open comm channel using names of 204th pilots that his side had learned of." You should specify that Lark was a Republic Starfighter Commander, it's not clear right now. Samonic ^(Talk) 09:22, 26 March 2023 (UTC)
  • Fixed all three. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 22:12, 29 March 2023 (UTC)

Fan

• Unless I'm forgeting something, the "|birth=" field in character infoboxes are for dates, and we don't have Bansu Ro's age so just putting Lothal there is redundant given that Lothal is mentioned as his homeworld right above.
  • Very well, removed. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 18:56, 4 September 2022 (UTC)
• " Colonies[5] planet[6] Carida" is there not a source that both identifies Carida as a planet and also places it in the Colonies? It would be nice if we could cut down on the number of ref notes in a single sentence. Fan26 (Talk) 20:45, 30 August 2022 (UTC)
• "to which Ro remarked that they were not elite enough to not have openings." Could you reword this? I get that the Ro means that the 204th isn't elite enough to avoid casualties, but it's worded kind of awkwardly and not every reader might understand it.
  • Slice the sentence in two to help it a bit. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 18:56, 4 September 2022 (UTC)
• "Squadron Five was enroute on the Quasar Fire-class cruiser-carrier" --> "Squadron Five's Quasar Fire-class cruiser-carrier was enroute to..."
  • Looks good, changed. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 18:56, 4 September 2022 (UTC)
• I think Freerock could use some context as a haven for Imperial deserters. Fan26 (Talk) 20:55, 30 August 2022 (UTC)
  • May as well. Added. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 18:56, 4 September 2022 (UTC)

Macaroni

• Prelim: 5 paragraphs is a lot for an intro, especially when looking at the completely arbitrary intro-length graph©️. I'd suggest cutting it down. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 00:18, 6 February 2023 (UTC)
  • Snip snip snip Done. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 21:28, 13 February 2023 (UTC)

CC-8

• Think there's enough content for a skills and abilities section? Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 06:14, 14 April 2023 (UTC)
  • That good? Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 19:38, 27 April 2023 (UTC)

SE

• In the first paragraph of the bio "The Empire's 204th Imperial Fighter Wing specifically requested Ro and Syrmo, as the top two ranked of their class, to make up for their recent losses,[2] the fighter wing being impressed by Ro's aptitude tests." The last bit about them being impressed feels a bit tacked on, can you make that into a separate sentence or clean it up a bit? Supreme Emperor ^Holocomm 04:37, 19 April 2023 (UTC)
  • How's that looking? Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 19:38, 27 April 2023 (UTC)

Uber

• If Ro was "born" on Lothal, the infobox needs to reflect that. Also, a person's place of birth may not necessarily be their homeworld as well. UberSoldat93 (talk) 10:37, 14 May 2023 (UTC)
  • It was that way because of Fan's first objection, but I see what you mean. Amended. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 12:13, 15 May 2023 (UTC)

spookly

• Some instances of infobox referencing not matching the body; mostly the physical traits.
• Worth noting clothing's coloring?—spookywilloww^talk 02:39, 16 May 2023 (UTC)

Lew

• Nath being a New Republic pilot is technically intro exclusive
• I think you could include control box in the equipment as part of his flight suit Lewisr (talk) 03:12, 25 June 2023 (UTC)
  • Both addressed. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 09:55, 25 June 2023 (UTC)

Fred strikes back

• Feels like there should be an article for this battle with the mobile recruitment base. Master Fredcerique(talk) (he/him) 10:27, 9 July 2023 (UTC)
  • It already exists, pipelinked to deployed and deploying in the intro and bio. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 12:14, 11 July 2023 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 22:03, 12 July 2023 (UTC)