Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Attichitcuk

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Attichitcuk

• Nominated by: Lelal Mekha ^{(Audience Room)} 12:51, June 9, 2014 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: *Cranky growl*

(0 Inqs/1 Users/1 Total)

Support

1. Perfect! Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 11:07, June 11, 2014 (UTC)
2. AV-6R7^{User talk:AV-6R7} 04:17, December 9, 2014 (UTC)

Object

Lee's charge

• Infobox: His place of birth needs to be mentioned after the year of his birth.
  • I added "Kashyyyk," for Rwookrrorro isn't certain. It is his family's place of origin, but he may have been born elsewhere. --Lelal Mekha ^{(Audience Room)} 11:51, June 10, 2014 (UTC)
• Early life: I believe his father and the guy his father killed + this guys clan are important enough to have their own articles. If not even CAs. ;)
  • The father does have an article, and I'm willing to create those other articles you mention. However, I really don't know what title I can give them. The Wookiee that was killed has no name, and neither does his clan. I think that "Unidentified Wookiee (Attichitcuk's father's victim)" would be a bit unwieldy... (BTW, I discovered a new bit of information about Itchy's lineage in the new 2014 Fact Files, and I just added it.) --Lelal Mekha ^{(Audience Room)} 11:51, June 10, 2014 (UTC)
    • Indeed. But as they sound important enough for an article, maybe you should just use these names. We have worse. :P Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 12:03, June 10, 2014 (UTC)
      • There we are, but you have to know that I feel bad for creating those two ugly things. :-p --Lelal Mekha ^{(Audience Room)} 12:28, June 10, 2014 (UTC)
• Early life: Same for his wife.
  • I actually erased any mention of his wife. Although she must have existed, the sources do not mention her at all. --Lelal Mekha ^{(Audience Room)} 11:51, June 10, 2014 (UTC)
    • Good choice, as it is possible that their were different ones. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 12:03, June 10, 2014 (UTC)
• The Clone Wars: A bit of context for Windu in the quote please.
  • Added. --Lelal Mekha ^{(Audience Room)} 11:51, June 10, 2014 (UTC)
• The Clone Wars: The 19 BBY date can not be directly sourced to Republic Commando. If you want to use it, you would have to place a reference like in this article.
  • The New Essential Chronology should do the trick. --Lelal Mekha ^{(Audience Room)} 11:51, June 10, 2014 (UTC)
• The Galactic Civil War: Could you pipelink Sith Lord to "true colors"?
  • Done. --Lelal Mekha ^{(Audience Room)} 11:51, June 10, 2014 (UTC)
• The Galactic Civil War: Did Solo really kill Nyklas? The latter ones article says he was only stunned.
  • Looks like you're right. Fixed. --Lelal Mekha ^{(Audience Room)} 11:51, June 10, 2014 (UTC)
• The Galactic Civil War: Can The Wookiee Storybook support the 0 BBY date?
  • Explanation added in ref. --Lelal Mekha ^{(Audience Room)} 11:51, June 10, 2014 (UTC)
• Recovering the Vor'Na'Tu: Same here for GB and the 0.5 date.
  • Chronology again. ;-) --Lelal Mekha ^{(Audience Room)} 11:51, June 10, 2014 (UTC)
• Recovering the Vor'Na'Tu: A little bit context for Energy Pummels is needed.
  • Added. --Lelal Mekha ^{(Audience Room)} 11:51, June 10, 2014 (UTC)
• That's it for so far. Very interesting article and one of the most enjoyable writing style I've ever seen. Great work. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 10:47, June 10, 2014 (UTC)
  • Many thanks, my friend. ;-) --Lelal Mekha ^{(Audience Room)} 11:51, June 10, 2014 (UTC)
• New governments and slaving rings: Is there a link for the Wookiee slaving ring?
  • Nope. I should add that several FAs (including Lumpawaroo and Ozrei N'takkilomandrife) mention that slaver ring/business anyway, without any article attached to it. --Lelal Mekha ^{(Audience Room)} 14:12, June 10, 2014 (UTC)
    • Fine with me then. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 11:07, June 11, 2014 (UTC)
• Burying his son: Can Vector Prime supply the date? Same for the other two. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 13:55, June 10, 2014 (UTC)
  • The 25 and 29 ABY dates are now sourced. The "six months after the Battle of Sernpidal" information comes from the book itself. --Lelal Mekha ^{(Audience Room)} 14:12, June 10, 2014 (UTC)

Code-8

• Most of the first paragraph in the Alaris Prime section is sourced to the NEC, but I think most of it comes from GB other than the dates.
  • I guess it's fixed that way. Please check it out. --Lelal Mekha ^{(Audience Room)} 09:58, June 13, 2014 (UTC)
• Can you add that Alaris Prime was a moon of the gas giant Alaris?
  • Added. --Lelal Mekha ^{(Audience Room)} 09:58, June 13, 2014 (UTC)
• Please mention in the second Alaris Prime paragraph that he left Markers to show the way to the camp which were followed by Chewie and Shoran.--Lelal Mekha ^{(Audience Room)} 09:58, June 13, 2014 (UTC)
  • Added too.
• Attichitcuk was told that a damaged power core I don't think the game shows them telling Attichitcuk about the power core --Lelal Mekha ^{(Audience Room)} 09:58, June 13, 2014 (UTC)
  • Tweaked.
• Also they never specifically realize that they found out who built the power core, just say they encountered the owners instead.
  • Altered. --Lelal Mekha ^{(Audience Room)} 09:58, June 13, 2014 (UTC)
• ''Chewbacca himself, the flesh of his flesh can you change the repetition here.
  • Well, this is less of a repetition than an idiom of Biblical origin. --Lelal Mekha ^{(Audience Room)} 09:58, June 13, 2014 (UTC)
    • Just realized, I think the term your looking for his flesh of his blood. Commander Code-8 ^{Felicitations malefactors!} 07:19, June 15, 2014 (UTC)
      • Never mind. Just replaced it with "his own offspring." --Lelal Mekha ^{(Audience Room)} 11:13, June 20, 2014 (UTC)
• Continuing later. Great article. Commander Code-8 ^{Felicitations malefactors!} 08:15, June 13, 2014 (UTC)
  • Thanks so far. ;-) --Lelal Mekha ^{(Audience Room)} 09:58, June 13, 2014 (UTC)
• Remove the bit in the New governments section about the Civil War ending, it keeps going until 19 ABY. Commander Code-8 ^{Felicitations malefactors!} 07:19, June 15, 2014 (UTC)
  • Done. --Lelal Mekha ^{(Audience Room)} 16:38, June 15, 2014 (UTC)
• Also, can you add the Alaris Prime colonists in the affiliations and link to them somewhere. Commander Code-8 ^{Felicitations malefactors!} 10:32, June 15, 2014 (UTC)
  • Added and linked. --Lelal Mekha ^{(Audience Room)} 16:38, June 15, 2014 (UTC)

Floyd

• I'm seeing you use the word "Republican" a few times - are you seeing that anywhere in one of these sources? We usually just use "Republic".
  • I only meant to use "republican" as in "of, relating to, or having the characteristics of [the] republic," but I guess its generates some rather partisan implications. I changed the two occurrences I could find. --Lelal Mekha ^{(Audience Room)} 21:21, November 18, 2014 (UTC)
• Do we need the part about Itchy telling C-3PO how he felt in the intro? It seems a little too minor.
  • Removed that part. --Lelal Mekha ^{(Audience Room)} 21:21, November 18, 2014 (UTC)
• "He descended from Bacca, the first great chieftain," First great chieftain of what? The Wookiees in general?
  • The original term was "Wookiee Chieftain," which I changed to just "Chieftain" because I didn't want to repeat "Wookiee" too often. The article now uses the full term. --Lelal Mekha ^{(Audience Room)} 21:21, November 18, 2014 (UTC)
• You should call the Shadowlands the Shadowlands when you first mention them, rather than the secondary name the "Nother World".
  • Fixed. --Lelal Mekha ^{(Audience Room)} 21:21, November 18, 2014 (UTC)
• Add context on the Trade Federation.
  • Done. --Lelal Mekha ^{(Audience Room)} 21:21, November 18, 2014 (UTC)
• Also, you should probably mention that the Trade Federation also wanted to colonize Alaris Prime, just so their presence there makes more sense.
  • Done too. --Lelal Mekha ^{(Audience Room)} 21:21, November 18, 2014 (UTC)
• The intro says that the Empire deemed Itchy to be too old to be enslaved, but I'm not seeing this in the body.
  • I can't seem to track down the source, so I've jsut reworded it. See if it satisfies you. --Lelal Mekha ^{(Audience Room)} 22:36, December 6, 2014 (UTC)
• One of your notes says that Chewie was born in 200 BBY - why is this not in the bio?
  • Added. --Lelal Mekha ^{(Audience Room)} 22:36, December 6, 2014 (UTC)
• I'd like a little context on what the Vor'Na'Tu actually was, beyond it being just a vague "artifact".
  • We don't know much else, actually. The game never explained what kind of powers it had, if any. --Lelal Mekha ^{(Audience Room)} 21:21, November 18, 2014 (UTC)
• Is there a link for the raid on Avatar Station?
  • The raid is covered in the Liberation of Kashyyyk, which is already linked in the article. --Lelal Mekha ^{(Audience Room)} 21:21, November 18, 2014 (UTC)
• I feel there are some things mentioned in the bio that could go in the P&T. Stuff like him not being boastful at all, in fact never mentioning it to anyone when he killed 20 katarns, stuff like that. Go through and see if there's anything missing.
• It also seems like there's info missing from the Skills and abilities. Talk about Itchy's prowess in his prime, and I'd like a note about how he was an incredibly accurate grenade thrower because of his training with the mind evaporator even in his old age.
• Also, see if there's a quote that can go in that section. IFYLOFD ^{(Enter the Floydome)} 06:51, November 18, 2014 (UTC)

Comments

Vote to remove nomination (Inq only)

1. Nominator has failed to address the most important objections to this nom. Three weeks has passed. IFYLOFD ^{(Enter the Floydome)} 04:41, December 9, 2014 (UTC)
2. Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 04:42, December 9, 2014 (UTC)
3. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 04:43, December 9, 2014 (UTC)
4. Cade Calrayn 04:47, December 9, 2014 (UTC)
5. OK FINE -- Darth Culator ^(Talk) 17:12, December 9, 2014 (UTC)