Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Attack on Korriban (fourth nomination)

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Attack on Korriban

  • Nominated by: Jace Onasi (talk) 06:33, September 30, 2018 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: This should be the final time I need to nominate this.

(0 Inqs/2 Users/2 Total)

(Votes required: 3 Inq vote(s) required to reach minimum. Additional 2 user or 1 Inq vote required to pass.)

Support

  1. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 10:09, October 23, 2018 (UTC)
  2. I'm going to try and see if I can get the articles for Zakuul Dropship, Zakuul Fighter, and Eternal Fleet Flagship verified and recreated by an established user, but I won't ask you to redlink them in the article. If they are created, I'll go back in and add them myself later. Fan26 (Talk) 14:06, November 19, 2018 (UTC)

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Fan26
  • In the infobox, the warships, shuttles, and starfighters are organized under the Eternal Fleet. I might be misunderstanding something, but as far as I can tell the Eternal Fleet only compromises the automated Eternal Fleet warships, while Eternal Empire ships staffed by human conscripts and enlistees fall under the purview of the Eternal Empire military. Fan26 (Talk) 01:20, October 3, 2018 (UTC)
    • You would be correct. I've made the change.--Jace Onasi (talk) 05:26, October 3, 2018 (UTC)
  • Actually, given that at least two of the three warships were of the same model as the Eternal Flagship (one of them probably is it, for all we know) would you further divide the info box fields, something along the lines of "At least two battlecruisers" and then "one other warship" and then redlink the former to Unidentified Zakuulan warship (Eternal Flagship)? I'll handle the page creation, as this is something I've been considering since I noticed the Eternal Flagship is destroyed at the Battle of Odessen, yet Vayin brings two ships of the same design to the Assault on Odessen. Fan26 (Talk) 13:42, October 3, 2018 (UTC)
  • Do we have any idea when the invasion of Balmorra takes place in relation to this? Fan26 (Talk) 12:46, October 17, 2018 (UTC)
    • The invasion would have taken place around the same time, but as far as I can tell there is nothing to indicate a more specific date.--Jace Onasi (talk) 08:00, October 21, 2018 (UTC)
      • We don't actually have an article for the balmorra attack, now that I've checked. I'll look into creating one, but since it largely has no bearing on the content of the article I'll strike this. Fan26 (Talk) 22:36, October 23, 2018 (UTC)
  • The bullet points for Imps and Zakuul in the infobox' combatants are unnecessary since they are the only participants in the battle. Please remove the Eternal Empire one. If you think they count due to Atroxa, you can add the Sith Order as a combatant as well. Fan26 (Talk) 13:13, October 24, 2018 (UTC)
    • Remediated.--Jace Onasi (talk) 04:01, November 3, 2018 (UTC)
      • Since Atroxa is the only clear Sith commander, she doesn't really need a bullet point either. Fan26 (Talk) 02:59, November 5, 2018 (UTC)
  • I've recently discovered articles for both the Eternal Fleet Flagship, the ship model mentioned above, and the Zakuul Fighter, the starfighter used by the Eternal Empire. I've added the former to the article over the page I created, but could you check to see if the starfighters used in the battle are similar to the ZF before either of us adds it to the page? Fan26 (Talk) 17:12, October 27, 2018 (UTC)
    • Long story, but those articles were deleted. I'm reverting my prior edit to the page. Fan26 (Talk) 01:35, October 31, 2018 (UTC)
QGJ
  • The Knights of Zakuul could use a tad of context in the intro.
  • The punctuation in this sentence is very weird looking and hard for the eye. Can you reword it to make it easier to read? Freeing himself, he split his consciousness into a new body—Valkorion,[13] and set to work forging a new empire from the swamps of the planet Zakuul; the Eternal Empire.
  • The "three centuries earlier" part cannot be sourced to KotOR II. The abandoned Sith Academy, previously used three centuries earlier during the Jedi Civil War,
  • Are the people tending to his wounds actually referred to as surgeons? As several Knights stood guard,[3] the surgeons operated upon him.
    • They aren't referred to as surgeons specifically. I changed the term to medic, which is hopefully a more broad term.--Jace Onasi (talk) 08:00, October 21, 2018 (UTC)
  • Darth Atroxa, the Sith commander, met her end by the prince's lightsaber after he used his cybernetic arm to twist her wrist. This disarmed her, allowing Arcann to land the finishing blow. Did this occur in the midst of the battle? Or was she captured and taken before him? The wording is unclear. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 07:47, October 8, 2018 (UTC)
Tommy
  • Can we get some audio files for the game quotes? Or are they in game text?
  • I assume you're double reffing the ships to source their names. Recently we've decided for ship names we don't have to have a source for their name, so you should be able to bring that down to the one source that says they participated.
  • We're trying to reduce cascading bullet points in infoboxes to one or two. This is more difficult in event articles but I believe the Sith Empire's casualties section can be reduced to two. Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 21:55, February 4, 2019 (UTC)

Comments

  • Here's a link to the previous nomination.--Jace Onasi (talk) 06:33, September 30, 2018 (UTC)

Vote to remove nomination (Inq only)

  1. Inqvote Objections unaddressed for over two weeks. 1358 (Talk) 22:12, February 19, 2019 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Exiled Jedi (talk) 04:08, February 20, 2019 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Attack on Korriban (fifth nomination)? Don't try it. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 04:13, February 20, 2019 (UTC)