Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Aron Peacebringer (second nomination)

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Aron Peacebringer

• Nominated by: IFYLOFD ^(Talk) 01:10, 16 July 2021 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Was killed a couple years ago for an update tag that actually had zero new information. Injustice!
• WookieeProject (optional): WP:COMICS

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Support

1. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 17:48, 4 August 2021 (UTC)
2. Still a better love story than Twilight... Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 04:44, 8 November 2021 (UTC)
3. UberSoldat93 (talk) 13:32, 25 January 2022 (UTC)
4. Supreme Emperor ^Holocomm 03:08, 27 February 2022 (UTC)
5. @Manoof anything is a better love story than Twilight :P VergenceScatter (talk) 07:23, 27 February 2022 (UTC)
6. Great work, but please make sure to be ok with my copy-edit. LucaRoR ^(Talk) 08:33, 27 February 2022 (UTC)
7. Samonic (Ah, yes. The negotiator.) 09:55, 27 February 2022 (UTC)

Object

Macaroni

• All of the image sizes can be increased.
• Ref 4 needs {{Cite web}}.
  • Some of those fields can be filled in and then the empty ones can be removed. I'm also not sure why you have |nobackup=1, the page is still live to be archived.
    • 13 years and I never really figured out templates, tbh. Hopefully this is addressed. IFYLOFD ^(Talk) 23:31, 19 July 2021 (UTC)
• Please kill that relationships section. Feel free to incorporate it into P+T if you'd like.
• Release date (full) needed for Star Wars 53.
• 3 ABY isn't sourced correctly.
• First paragraph of "Capture" can be split up.
• Trust me, more to come seeing as you weren't the original writer :P JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 01:19, 16 July 2021 (UTC)
  • All should be addressed. IFYLOFD ^(Talk) 20:25, 18 July 2021 (UTC)
• I don't think 2 ABY is sourced correctly either.
• The bio only mentions that he was born in the Shiva system and neglects to mention Shiva IV as the intro/infobox do.
• Intro should mention his species.
• All physical traits listed in the infobox are not mentioned in the body.
• Is there any reason he's referred to as Aron and not Peacebringer?
  • He's referred to as "Aron" earlier on because he doesn't receive the "Peacebringer" honorific until after he becomes Warlord. IFYLOFD ^(Talk) 01:54, 19 July 2021 (UTC)
• "must be highly radioactive" is not exactly using past tense and can be reworded.
• Is an article needed for these T'Syriél stormtroopers? And what about his daughter that died?
  • I don't think one is necessary for the T'Syriel stormtroopers—there's nothing to indicate they're anything different from regular stormtroopers outside of being a different species underneath the armor. Created one for the daughter. IFYLOFD ^(Talk) 01:54, 19 July 2021 (UTC)
• A bit more context for each of the Rebel reinforcements would be appreciated.
• Can you add a section header for the non-relationships bit of the P+T?
• Missing {{Mediacat}}.
• (Review note) There was some significant underlinking in the article, if you're planning on restoring any more old FAs you'll want to check that before nominating. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 00:45, 19 July 2021 (UTC)
  • Rest of the objections should be good to go. IFYLOFD ^(Talk) 01:54, 19 July 2021 (UTC)
• I don't think Leia should really get a relationships subsection—he was attracted to her but didn't really have a huge relationship with her.
• Missing skills and abilities section.
• Missing equipment section. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 00:22, 22 July 2021 (UTC)
  • These should be addressed.
• Does the comics companion use ABY or ASW4? If the latter, you need to explain how that corresponds to ABY, such as how it's done here.
• Are any of the double refs really necessary?
• A little context for the Falcon, please.
• Lastly, the full date for the comic isn't self-sourcing; it needs a new ref. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 21:18, 27 July 2021 (UTC)
  • I think all these should be good. IFYLOFD ^(Talk) 04:13, 4 August 2021 (UTC)

UberSoldat

• Please digitize the comic book images. UberSoldat93 (talk) 13:51, 21 September 2021 (UTC)
  • Should be done. IFYLOFD ^(Talk) 21:43, 3 October 2021 (UTC)
    • Infobox image should be at least 400px per Layout Guide. UberSoldat93 (talk) 17:20, 14 October 2021 (UTC)
      • I'll be straight up with you: I don't know how to go in and resize it like that. Never been an image guy, to my shame. Any suggestions? IFYLOFD ^(Talk) 22:00, 25 October 2021 (UTC)
        • No need to resize, try getting a larger crop from the same source. UberSoldat93 (talk) 07:50, 26 October 2021 (UTC)
          • So that picture of Aron is from one where he's in the background, and I wasn't really able to get a larger crop. I just swapped it out with another picture, let me know what you think. IFYLOFD ^(Talk) 02:02, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
            • That works. UberSoldat93 (talk) 11:37, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
• I'm seeing space for more images, namely under "Encounter with an offworlder," "Capture," "Personality and traits," and "Skills and abilities." Usually 2 images are the norm for a 3-paragraph section (one at the beginning; one at the end for example), if there's enough space. UberSoldat93 (talk) 09:17, 22 November 2021 (UTC)
  • Better? IFYLOFD ^(Talk) 05:13, 8 December 2021 (UTC)
• Duplicate ref in Capture's last paragraph.
  • Fixed.
• This reads as if the assailant didn't in fact miss and landed the blow. "On reaching Organa, he found that she was safe, her assailant having nearly missed her before she turned the knife against the Imperial officer."
  • Changed.
• Surely you can word this better to avoid the repeating the same word three times. "Peacebringer realized that Leia did not love him and never would; that realization allowed him to realize that he could live without her."
  • Hahahahahaha what a terrible sentence. Fixed.
• Context for Lando Calrissian.
  • Added.
• A regular Imperial Star Destroyer I'm assuming? "However, the ball was interrupted by the arrival of an Imperial Star Destroyer in orbit."
  • Appears to be. Want me to specify?
    • Yes please, and link to that specific model (whether it's an Imperial I or II). UberSoldat93 (talk) 19:04, 15 December 2021 (UTC)
      • Done. IFYLOFD ^(Talk) 01:13, 25 December 2021 (UTC)
• Inconsistent capitalization: "warlord" and "Warlord."
  • Made it consistent.
• Equipment is the first time you mention a "saber," when only "sword" is used before this. UberSoldat93 (talk) 07:44, 29 November 2021 (UTC)
  • Fixed.
• I personally don't like how the intro begins. Usually in formal writing, we don't need to point out a character's biggest achievement right at the start e.g. "Darth Vader was the most feared Sith Lord in the galaxy" or "Luke Skywalker was the hero of the Rebellion." This is already sitewide precedent. UberSoldat93 (talk) 07:47, 29 November 2021 (UTC)
  • Better? IFYLOFD ^(Talk) 02:55, 5 December 2021 (UTC)
    • Much better. UberSoldat93 (talk) 19:04, 15 December 2021 (UTC)
• Let's see a break in "Battling the Empire"'s second paragraph; it currently takes up more than half the screen on my monitor. UberSoldat93 (talk) 11:18, 16 January 2022 (UTC)
  • Broken. IFYLOFD ^(Talk) 03:52, 25 January 2022 (UTC)

Manoof

• Just check this update is ok, needed to understand that section a bit more so just did it. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 10:38, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
  • Good to go.
• Skills and abilities - can we mention his piloting skills? Great read! Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 10:38, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
  • Added in. Thanks for the look IFYLOFD ^(Talk) 01:47, 8 November 2021 (UTC)

Fred strikes back

• Some small context for Jain Havero upon his first mention would be nice. MasterFred(talk) 12:28, 23 January 2022 (UTC)
  • Added. IFYLOFD ^(Talk) 03:53, 25 January 2022 (UTC)

SE

• Is there an article for the destruction of K'avor?
  • Linked
• Is there anything specific to Calian sword combat that would make it article worthy?
  • Not that I can really tell, and there aren't any specific details about it anywhere that I've found.
• Are any of the death cults named, or is it just a general mention of cults?
  • Nope, none named.
• "Peacebringer signaled the Rebel princess and staged a diversion" What was the diversion? Supreme Emperor ^Holocomm 00:07, 6 February 2022 (UTC)
  • Update, I'll be getting to these tonight IFYLOFD ^(Talk) 19:05, 21 February 2022 (UTC)
    • Should all be done. IFYLOFD ^(Talk) 03:55, 22 February 2022 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 19:05, 27 February 2022 (UTC)

• Note to self: Continue full review from "Capture." UberSoldat93 (talk) 09:18, 22 November 2021 (UTC)
• Reviewing note: Take care with missing links. UberSoldat93 (talk) 07:46, 29 November 2021 (UTC)