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Agamar
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Most folk'll never lose a toe, but then again some folk'll, like Keyan the slack-jawed yokel. Green Tentacle (Talk) 16:13, 24 March 2008 (UTC)- Most folk'll never eat a skunk, but then again some folk'll… Graestan(Talk) 18:08, 24 March 2008 (UTC)
- I've always like reviewing planet articles. Greyman
(Talk) 21:14, 24 March 2008 (UTC) - This article about stuff from the X-wing games is really educational, since I've never played them. Chack Jadson (Talk) 22:39, 24 March 2008 (UTC)
- Very well-written. Excellent. Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:25, 25 March 2008 (UTC)
Some folk'll never blow up Death Stars, but then again some some folk'll, like Wormie, the farmboy yokel. Atarumaster88 (Talk page) 22:03, 27 March 2008 (UTC)- Cull Tremayne 22:15, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
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Image objections:- File:Binka.jpg—Blurry.
- De-blurrified. Green Tentacle (Talk) 01:09, 25 March 2008 (UTC)
- File:Agamar.jpg—Distorted.
File:Agamar2.jpg—Distorted.
- --Imperialles 22:12, 24 March 2008 (UTC)
- File:Binka.jpg—Blurry.
- Toprawa:
Please reword "governed by Governor," which is a bit redundant. I might recommend "led by Governor": "was governed by Governor Challep"- Fixed. Green Tentacle (Talk) 01:06, 25 March 2008 (UTC)
This clause is a tad confusing. It seems to imply that all mercenaries in general spent time in Agamar's service, but I think you mean to refer to just those in Agamar's service. If so, please clarify: "and most mercenaries at the time spent a few months in Agamar's service"- That's what the source says. Guess they got through a lot of mercenaries for some reason. :P Green Tentacle (Talk) 01:06, 25 March 2008 (UTC)
Assuming this information exists, please add a little bit here to explain who Shogar Tok is and why reinforcing him/her was significant: "Separatist armies were still fighting in the Mirgoshir system and unable to reinforce Shogar Tok on Brentaal IV"- Fixed. Green Tentacle (Talk) 01:06, 25 March 2008 (UTC)
Please fix incomplete sentence: "Where pillars and archways divided the corridor into segments, holographic art depicting Agamarian history and culture."- Fixed. Green Tentacle (Talk) 01:06, 25 March 2008 (UTC)
Minor: unless this is organized in this way for a reason I am unaware, the infobox "Points of interest" should probably be listed in alphabetical order.Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:51, 25 March 2008 (UTC)- Fixed. Green Tentacle (Talk) 01:06, 25 March 2008 (UTC)
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The Clone Wars segment (and this may be a flaw with the source) says that Agamar was attacked by Dooku while it was under his control. That's vaguely stupid of him, or the timeline is messed up.- The timeline is messed up. You could theorize that the Republic retook it before he attacked, but that would be purely original research. Green Tentacle (Talk) 20:56, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
Who is Danni Quee? Context please.- Contexted. Green Tentacle (Talk) 20:56, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
Link to appropriate battles of Yuuzhan Vong War.- Which ones did I miss? Green Tentacle (Talk) 20:56, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
"This stereotype cast them as poor yokels". Who is "them"? Context please.- Better? Green Tentacle (Talk) 20:56, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
'Due to the Center's close proximity to the sea, it had a clear influence on the architecture." unclear antecedent.- Fixed. I think. Green Tentacle (Talk) 20:56, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
- Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88 (Talk page) 20:38, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
Comments Approved by Inquisitorius 23:17, 1 April 2008 (UTC)