Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/8t88/Legends

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8t88

(5 Inqs/2 Users/7 Total)

Support

  1. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:08, 17 January 2008 (UTC)
  2. I like. Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:54, 17 January 2008 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Dumb droid. Atarumaster88 Jedi Order (Talk page) 21:36, 23 January 2008 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote -- Darth Culator (Talk) 02:19, 27 January 2008 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Enough 8s already! Jesus! Graestan(Talk) 23:24, 3 February 2008 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Jaina Solo(Talk) 19:24, 9 February 2008 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote StarNeptuneTalk to me! 20:54, 9 February 2008 (UTC)

Oppose

  1. Toprawa says
    • I'm not sure "cash" is the best word to use here. Cash seems to imply the real-world equivalent of paper money, and I'm not sure this even exists IU: "8t88 charged huge fees, to be paid upfront in cash"
      • Addressed.
    • The second paragraph of "Double cross" is a wee bit play-by-play. Try and trim the fat a little.
      • See about it now.
        • Veddy nice.
    • "Pitifully" is a bit POV. Try and use a better term: "pitifully plotting to reclaim his lost body"
      • Addressed.
    • It seems like you may need an article of sort in this phrase: "while he next resurfaced with ASP droid's head on Omze's Incredible Travelling Starport."
      • I don't understand what you're saying here.
        • Articles, as in "a," "an," "the."
    • In this context, "amazing" seems a bit POV. It could be changed to state that it was amazing to certain individuals, for ex: "He did, however, have many Human-like emotions, and, amazingly, possessed"
      • Is "somehow" any better?
        • Si, senor.
    • Is an IR sensor and IR vision not the same thing? "He was also equipped with an infrared sensor, a microscopic imager, a holographic projector/recorder, extremely perceptive audio sensors, a concealed beam transmitter, and a broadband communication antenna, as well as a comlink, heuristic processor, improved sensor package, infrared vision, and translator unit."
      • My mistake.
    • Kudos for properly punctuating your quotations! ;) Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:38, 17 January 2008 (UTC)
      • All thanks to you. ;) Thanks for the review, T&R. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:09, 17 January 2008 (UTC)
        • Best line of that whole game..."He is Dark Jedi."..."Jedi?"..."Dark Jedi." Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:54, 17 January 2008 (UTC)
  2. From the desk of Atarumaster88
    • "The Tiss'shar formulated various lies to tell Jerec to account for his failure as he ran to a landing pad on the moon" This doesn't quite make sense, as the droid is not a Tiss'shar.
      • Supposed to be Tiss'shar droid. Addressed.
    • "After temporarily incapacitating the Kowakian monkey-lizard, the man killed Grendel and used his lightsaber to carve open one of the hornagaunt's stomachs and retrieve the severed head". Try to avoid using "the man" whenever possible.
      • Hokay. Addressed.
    • Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating Day. Atarumaster88 Jedi Order (Talk page) 21:23, 23 January 2008 (UTC)
  3. From the squalid cubicle of Graestan:
    • Reword "the leading droid in charge"
    • Reword "every and any living beings" to clear up issues of singular/plural.
    • The word "though" is heavily overused.
    • "Jerec's minions had found a map to the valley on the ceiling of Morgan Katarn's home during the events on Nar Shaddaa; they removed them and had them brought to Barons Hed, the moon's capital city."—Huh?
    • The comma is also severely overused.
      • Any better?
    • Please don't call it a "Lambda-class shuttle" twice.
    • "Powered by hydraulic tubing"…"had hydraulic limbs" is redundant.
    • No information is referenced to "Two Peas in a Pod."
      • There's only a single mention about his head being used to kill Pic; nothing whatsoever to add to the article.
    • Graestan(Talk) 00:16, 3 February 2008 (UTC)

Comments

Approved by Inquisitorius 16:13, 10 February 2008 (UTC)