Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Xonr

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The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a Comprehensive article nomination that was unsuccessful. Please do not modify it.

Xonr

  • Nominated by: UberSoldat93 (talk) 09:37, December 26, 2019 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Another member of the same species as Silvasu Fi. It's unfortunate we don't have an official name for them yet.

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Ben
  • Exact release date of comic must be given in the BTS section, probably after the other details, with the source of the date, which you can usually find from the comic's article.
  • I feel like there could be an image added for the biography.
    • That might squash the text. I'll instead add one next to the personality section. UberSoldat93 (talk) 10:37, December 26, 2019 (UTC)
      • I've tested it, none of the sections after the bio are big enough to accommodate one. UberSoldat93 (talk) 10:48, December 26, 2019 (UTC)
  • Try to avoid using 'they' for Xonr. Stating him as 'the bounty hunter' instead of that works better. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 10:02, December 26, 2019 (UTC)
    • I cannot use "him" since the character's gender is never specified, I will reduce the usage of "they" though. UberSoldat93 (talk) 10:37, December 26, 2019 (UTC)
      • 'They' could be confused with both Valance and Xonr, which is why I was suggesting using 'the bounty hunter' instead to distinguish Xonr from Valance, who can be referred to as 'the cyborg'. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 11:04, December 26, 2019 (UTC)
        • Managed to remove one more instance of 'they'. UberSoldat93 (talk) 12:05, December 26, 2019 (UTC)
  • Xonr's appearance (e.g. skin & eye color and the horns) can be described in the P & T section. Xonr is the same species as Silvasu Fi, which could be mentioned as a description of their species. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 11:04, December 26, 2019 (UTC)
Zed
  • The intro could probably be expanded a little bit so that it's at least a couple of sentences long.
  • For the death date, you can use the same "by 3 ABY" dating that's used in other Target Vader articles. You can also specify this timeline in the biography rather than just using "at some point."
  • As inconvenient as it is, "they" should generally not be used at all when referring to individuals of unspecified gender.
    • I removed the usage of 'they' where I could, but certain instances had to be left in. UberSoldat93 (talk) 12:05, December 26, 2019 (UTC)
  • You could expand on the end of the Biography, particularly the part where Valance reveals he led the bounty hunters into a trap, and Xonr's reaction. Additionally, Xonr's confidence in being able to kill Valance despite the presence of the other hunters can be added to the Personality and traits section.
  • "Xonr respected the Bounty Hunter Code despite living the life of a bounty hunter…" I don't think "despite" really works here, since the code is meant to be followed by bounty hunters. You could instead maybe clarify that Xonr considered bounty hunters, including him/her/themself to be "scum."
  • I think the dialogue between Xonr and the weapons check droid can be added to the Equipment section.
  • Even I missed this at first, but one of Xonr's legs is cybernetic. Zed42 (talk) 11:07, December 26, 2019 (UTC)

Comments

  • Article has exceeded 250 words after addressing objections. Nomination needs to be removed, I will nominate this for a Good article now. UberSoldat93 (talk) 12:06, December 26, 2019 (UTC)