Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/White Panther

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White Panther

• Nominated by: Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 18:58, November 16, 2011 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Hm.

(2 ECs/3 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. Aleena awesomeness.--Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 16:12, November 17, 2011 (UTC)
2. NaruHina ^Talk 16:05, November 22, 2011 (UTC)
3. Tinwe^(comlink) 18:32, November 23, 2011 (UTC)
4. —Axinal ^{Convocation Chamber} 01:15, November 24, 2011 (UTC)
5. Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 16:42, December 4, 2011 (UTC)

Object

• "...the name of the retrofitted podracer of Aleena podracer pilot." This sentence sounds like it ends right in the middle of something. Could you fix it so it sounds more complete and understandable?
  • Fixed. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk
• Again, this article needs a {{1stm}} template.
  • Added. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 15:00, November 17, 2011 (UTC)
• Otherwise, good job.--Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 02:32, November 17, 2011 (UTC)
  • Thanks. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 15:00, November 17, 2011 (UTC)
• Rubedo
  • He was not "mentioned" in the book. He appeared on a viewscreen.
    • Yes. And therefore it is mentioned. Or should I chnange it to a {{1st}}? Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 13:57, November 21, 2011 (UTC)
      • Maybe {{1stp}} would suit better? 1358 ^(Talk) 15:30, November 22, 2011 (UTC)
        • I think that (First appearance) (Appears on viewscreen) is best. (First pictured) is more of an OOU label; I don't think it's applicable to a prose-only book. Menkooroo 15:34, November 22, 2011 (UTC)
          • Here's some precedent. NaruHina ^Talk 16:05, November 22, 2011 (UTC)
            • Suppose that works. I don't see why (First pictured) couldn't be used in an IU article though; nothing in it indicates it's OOU. 1358 ^(Talk) 16:41, November 22, 2011 (UTC)
              • Well, in this case it's not even exactly a picture. It's a live stream of people on the track. I'm fairly certain that we've even just called that sort of thing an appearance without any note in the past, but I don't think specificity hurts here. NaruHina ^Talk 17:32, November 22, 2011 (UTC)
  • Boba Fett recognizing Kador and the craft should be in the article.
    • Added. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 13:57, November 21, 2011 (UTC)
  • The name isn't italicized in the source? Do you have a physical copy? NaruHina ^Talk 21:51, November 20, 2011 (UTC)
    • Indeed it is italicized. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 13:57, November 21, 2011 (UTC)
• The first sentence reads a bit awkwardly, mainly because of the two "of the" constructions in such a close proximity of each other. Could it be tightened to just "White Panther was the retrofitted podracer of..."? Tinwe^(comlink) 18:23, November 23, 2011 (UTC)
  • Yep, done. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 18:25, November 23, 2011 (UTC)

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