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Victory at Batonn
- Nominated by: Tommy-Macaroni (he/they) 21:27, 18 September 2024 (UTC)
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- Date Archived: 01:49, 22 September 2024 (UTC)
- Final word count: 219 words (0 introduction, 143 body, 76 behind the scenes)
- Word count at nomination time: 197 words (0 introduction, 121 body, 76 behind the scenes)
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CometSmudge (talk) 18:17, 19 September 2024 (UTC)- —spookywillowwtalk 01:25, 22 September 2024 (UTC)
- Lewisr (talk) 01:49, 22 September 2024 (UTC)
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Tian Karmiya should have context. (I know you do mention she's a commander later, but it's far enough away from her first mention in the article that I don't think it's enough)- I think we can get caught up on context as reviewers sometimes, as there's plenty of context here; the first paragraph is essentially all context for her. I've added that she was an Ilohian but I think anything more would be excessive and unnecessary.
I think it would be worth mentioning Canonhaus's thoughts on her service on the ship.- I'm slightly confused by this, are you referring to the "fine service" bit? This is in the article ("Tian Karmiya finely served"), so I assume you're wanting me to say that this was Canonhaus' opinion? I'm reluctant to do that, as it could be factual. Just before, we hear about Tian's prime marks at Carida, which we can assume is not opinion based. As such, it's unclear whether her fine service aboard these ships is factual (ie reports from their captains) or Canonhaus' opinion. I'd therefore rather leave it as it, rather than speculating that it was Canonhaus' opinion.
- I was kind of unclear about that, I meant just mentioning that he had those thoughts that year. CometSmudge (talk) 16:57, 19 September 2024 (UTC)
- I'm slightly confused by this, are you referring to the "fine service" bit? This is in the article ("Tian Karmiya finely served"), so I assume you're wanting me to say that this was Canonhaus' opinion? I'm reluctant to do that, as it could be factual. Just before, we hear about Tian's prime marks at Carida, which we can assume is not opinion based. As such, it's unclear whether her fine service aboard these ships is factual (ie reports from their captains) or Canonhaus' opinion. I'd therefore rather leave it as it, rather than speculating that it was Canonhaus' opinion.
Thrawn's promotion doesn't seem that relevant, so you could probably cut that out.CometSmudge (talk) 22:38, 18 September 2024 (UTC)- I disagree. I used this as a way to give some implicit context to the victory at Batonn; someone receiving such a promotion shows it was a) a very successful victory and b) a highly impactful event. Both of these pieces of information are relevant to this ship. The sentence succinctly provides context for the vessel's namesake, and I would argue this is more relevant than the Ilohian mention earlier. Tommy-Macaroni (he/they) 08:28, 19 September 2024 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 01:49, 22 September 2024 (UTC)