Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Unidentified nurse (Coruscant)

The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a comprehensive article nomination that was unsuccessful. Please do not modify it.

Unidentified nurse (Coruscant)

• Nominated by: Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 20:24, June 27, 2011 (UTC)
• Nomination comments:Unidentified stuff up for TOR

(2 ECs/1 Users/3 Total)

Support

1. —Axinal ^{Convocation Chamber} 21:43, June 27, 2011 (UTC)
2. Looks good.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 16:15, June 30, 2011 (UTC)
3. HelllOOOOO, Nurse! ~Savage 15:13, July 15, 2011 (UTC)

Object

1. Axinal
   • "...her blue medical uniform looked like a tent on her." This kind of toes the line of the WP:NPOV policy. However, if you said exactly who thought it looked like a tent, it could stay.
     • Actually it wasn't a person in the book that thought it. It was Paul S. Kemp. "Her uniform looked like a blue tent on her stout body." is what the book says. But I guess it could be considered POV. So, what exactly would the decision on that be? Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 21:03, June 27, 2011 (UTC)
       • Typically, newer novels are told from a particular person's point of view, even narrative text. The PoV typically changes from section to section, chapter to chapter, but you almost never hear the internal thoughts of two different individuals within the same section. Can you discern through whose eyes the events unfold in this particular section of the novel?—Axinal ^{Convocation Chamber} 21:18, June 27, 2011 (UTC)
         • Darth Malgus.
   • Is there an article for the medical facility?
     • I couldn't find one.
       • I'd say it's worthy of one, if you care to create it. You could just write the basic information and leave it as a stub if you wish.—Axinal ^{Convocation Chamber} 21:23, June 27, 2011 (UTC)
         • I added the page. But it's pretty small. I'll cleanup it up and enlarge it myself once I get some time. Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 21:34, June 27, 2011 (UTC)
   • Could you add the year for the Battle of Coruscant, as well as the name of the larger conflict?
     • How's that? Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 21:26, June 27, 2011 (UTC)
   • Darth Malgus and Eleena Daru could both use context in the intro, and Malgus could also use some in the bio.
     • OK.
   • The description of the nurse in the bio, such as her hair color, weight, etc., would be more suited in the P+T rather than the bio.
     • I transferred it.
   • Could you add Category:Unidentified individuals?
     • OK.
   • I think that's it from me; nice work otherwise.—Axinal ^{Convocation Chamber} 20:52, June 27, 2011 (UTC)
     • Great thanks! Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 21:19, June 27, 2011 (UTC)
2. Bob
   • No quotes?
     • There was a main quote, but I added another quote to the biography.
   • The P&T claims that she was not afraid to defy Malgus, but the bio doesn't bear this out. What does she do to defy him, and can you add that to the bio? ~Savage 14:28, July 13, 2011 (UTC)
     • Is that better? Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 22:55, July 14, 2011 (UTC)
3. Context needed for Daru's reason for being in the facility in the first place. - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 10:12, July 14, 2011 (UTC)
   • Done. Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 23:00, July 14, 2011 (UTC)
     • Struck, but see Menk's comments below about GAN. - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 17:59, July 20, 2011 (UTC)
4. At 314 words, it's no longer eligible to be a Comprehensive Article. You can take it to the GAN page, though. Menkooroo 03:38, July 19, 2011 (UTC)

Comments

• I'll review this fully once it's been moved to the GAN. Darth Trayus^{(Trayus Academy)} 17:38, July 20, 2011 (UTC)