Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Unidentified girl

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Unidentified girl

Nominated by: YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 20:28, 11 October 2021 (UTC)
Nomination comments: No First Order or comics WookieeProject?
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~~Her physical appearance is info-box exclusive.~~ LucaRoR ^(Talk) 20:33, 11 October 2021 (UTC)
- Done and done. I'm not used to writing articles this short :P -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 20:50, 11 October 2021 (UTC)
  - No probelm! :) LucaRoR ^(Talk) 18:29, 13 October 2021 (UTC)
~~After reading through the comic, it looks like the woman and her companions were preparing an ambush against Kylo Ren. I think you should mention it.~~
- Done — YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 16:32, 16 October 2021 (UTC)
The fact that stormtroopers took part in the fight and that Ren tried to hit her with a strike of his lightsaber should be mentioned, in my opinion. Did the First Order successfully conquer the planet?
- Yes, they did. Kylo didn't really care about it, but they conquered it. I'll update it when I get a chance -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 18:41, 13 October 2021 (UTC)
- Done — YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 16:32, 16 October 2021 (UTC)
~~Make sure you're ok with this copy-edit.~~ LucaRoR ^(Talk) 18:29, 13 October 2021 (UTC)
- 👍🏼 -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 18:41, 13 October 2021 (UTC)

~~Full release date is not self-sourcing.~~ JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 15:19, 14 October 2021 (UTC)
- Got it. -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 18:24, 14 October 2021 (UTC)
~~This short sentence breaks up the flow of the article. I'd like to see it reworded. "Her forces fought stormtroopers."~~

Date note does not mention what comic you're discussing.

Cite web should use a publisher parameter.

~~Duplicate link.~~
- Addressed all of those
(Review note) Pipelinks need to be capitalized (e.g. [[Death|kill]], not [[death|kill]].) JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 04:50, 17 October 2021 (UTC)
- Did not know that. I’ve definitely done it a lot. Will keep an eye out going forward — YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 05:52, 17 October 2021 (UTC)
~~A disambig page for other unidentified women is needed.~~ JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 16:02, 21 October 2021 (UTC)
- Done. — YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 16:41, 21 October 2021 (UTC)
~~This sentence feels like speculation: "She knew she would likely die challenging the Supreme Leader that way."~~

~~It would be preferrable to use an official source instead of an external site. Obviously it's reliable but something like Launchpad from Insider or SW.com would be better.~~ JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 22:37, 25 October 2021 (UTC)
- As discussed on Discord, each has been addressed. -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 03:15, 26 October 2021 (UTC)

~~I don't think you need to note Ren was strong in the Force because you already called him a fearsome Force-sensitive~~ Editoronthewiki (talk) 16:56, 21 October 2021 (UTC)
- You are so right. Removed — YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 17:41, 21 October 2021 (UTC)

~~That image looks rather blurry to me.~~ UberSoldat93 (talk) 13:17, 28 October 2021 (UTC)
- I uploaded a new version, though I'll admit I can hardly tell the difference. Let me know if it still needs work. -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 15:18, 28 October 2021 (UTC)
  - Handled via Discord. UberSoldat93 (talk) 16:23, 28 October 2021 (UTC)

~~Made some changes to reflect the article title with my edit. One thing for you to decide though: girl or women? We can't have both.~~
- Made it girl. -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 22:43, 8 November 2021 (UTC)
~~Can use some description of her attire~~ OOM 224 21:08, 8 November 2021 (UTC)
- I described her cloak as green, but I really don't know what color her pants are since I am red-green color deficient. Is that good enough? -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 22:43, 8 November 2021 (UTC)
  - That's fine then OOM 224 22:59, 8 November 2021 (UTC)

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 22:59, 8 November 2021 (UTC)