Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Unidentified freighter (Tatooine)

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Unidentified freighter (Tatooine)

• Nominated by: OOM 224 ༼༽^{talk}༼༽ 15:23, August 3, 2020 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: My first CAN!

(3 ECs/0 Users/3 Total)

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Support

1. Fan26 (Talk) 04:21, August 19, 2020 (UTC)
2. UberSoldat93 (talk) 10:39, August 19, 2020 (UTC)
3. QuiGonJinn ^(Talk) 13:07, August 27, 2020 (UTC)

Object

Fan

• I would say the second part of the second sentence in the intro is not necessary, as it's not about the article subject and therefore irrelevant.
• Looking at the first paragraph in the "History" section, there's a few things that need to be fixed. "the Toydarian dealer at Mos Espa,"-Watto hasn't been referred to yet (and needs to be linked to also), so describing him rather than identifying him by name is incorrect. I think a little bit of the context for Mos Espa can be cut down as well.
• I think there's enough room in the body for an image of a related subject. Fan26 (Talk) 16:45, August 3, 2020 (UTC)
  • All sorted. - - - OOM 224 ༼༽^{talk}༼༽ 17:25, August 3, 2020 (UTC)
    • There's still a fair bit that's more about Watto or Mos Espa or something else, not the freighter. Fan26 (Talk) 21:14, August 3, 2020 (UTC)
      • Reworded. - - - OOM 224 ༼༽^{talk}༼༽ 07:08, August 4, 2020 (UTC)
        • Please rearrange it and cut down on the unnecessary context. Start by saying the freighter was hired by Watto to transport the droids, and then provide necessary info regarding their use and the intended destination. Fan26 (Talk) 16:18, August 7, 2020 (UTC)
          • How does it look now? - - - OOM 224 ༼༽^{talk}༼༽ 16:37, August 7, 2020 (UTC)

Ratts

• Is this article about a freighter class or an individual ship? The intro and infobox type seem to point to the former, but no mention of the class is brought up again in the body. Is their any indication that the freighter even belongs to a class and isn't just a unique ship? If not, the article should be adjusted to focus only on the ship in the game. RattsT (talk) 10:31, August 5, 2020 (UTC)
  • Individual ship. Adjusted article accordingly. - - - OOM 224 ༼༽^{talk}༼༽ 11:50, August 5, 2020 (UTC)

Zed

• The name field in the infobox of conjecturally-titled pages should match the page's actual title. Zed42 (talk) 10:35, August 5, 2020 (UTC)
  • Fixed. - - - OOM 224 ༼༽^{talk}༼༽ 11:50, August 5, 2020 (UTC)

Comments

• Note: The article has just been updated with new information. - - - OOM 224 ༼༽^{talk}༼༽ 20:43, August 3, 2020 (UTC)