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Unidentified clone trooper (Geonosian kill)

  • Nominated by: Manoof (talk) 01:28, April 3, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:1/3 unidentified clones from RepCom

(4 ECs/2 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Good work. Clone Commander Lee Talk 11:07, April 9, 2014 (UTC)
  2. ECvote Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:26, April 13, 2014 (UTC)
  3. ECvote Supreme Emperor (talk) 03:17, April 20, 2014 (UTC)
  4. ECvote Corellian PremierJedi symbolThe Force will be with you always 20:32, April 21, 2014 (UTC)
  5. Commander Code-8 Felicitations malefactors! 09:13, April 28, 2014 (UTC)
  6. ECvote Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:28, May 1, 2014 (UTC)

Object

Code-8
  • The intro should be shortened to a couple of sentences, and some of the information is in there that isn't in the bio. Commander Code-8 Felicitations malefactors! 05:25, April 3, 2014 (UTC)
    • How's that? Manoof (talk) 08:10, April 3, 2014 (UTC)
  • You should link to the Battle of Geonosis in the intro and body.
    • Is that ok?
  • In the P&T you should have links to Imperial standard meter and Phase I clone trooper armor. Commander Code-8 Felicitations malefactors! 06:55, April 4, 2014 (UTC)
  • Links to 22 BBY are in the wrong order in the bio.
    • Fixed
  • I'm pretty sure we don't usually use a characters birthdate if all we know is that it's before the year they died. Commander Code-8 Felicitations malefactors! 07:41, April 13, 2014 (UTC)
    • Removed
      • Kamino should be removed from the birth section as well in the infobox as it just repeats what we know the homeworld section says
        • Removed
  • Human needs to be mentioned somewhere in the bio.
    • Redundant as clone trooper insinuates he is male (and human)
      • Still needs to be included as its in the infobox.
        • Added
  • Mention that RC-1138 was nicknamed Boss properly in the bio as it is in the intro
    • Removed mention in intro
      • What I'm asking for here is that in the bio you properly establish that RC-1138's nickname is Boss, adding nicknamed "Boss" after first linking to RC-1138 in the bio will do.
  • The blaster he's holding should be mentioned, and perhaps that and the Phase 1 armor bit should be put in an equipment section. Commander Code-8 Felicitations malefactors! 08:30, April 20, 2014 (UTC)
    • I have been told that as the information is minor, it can be placed in the P&T section ([1]) Manoof (talk) 00:25, April 26, 2014 (UTC)
  • The reference to the Star Wars.com encyclopedia should link to the clone trooper page itself. See here for what I mean. Commander Code-8 Felicitations malefactors! 07:46, April 26, 2014 (UTC)
    • Ah thanks!Manoof (talk) 05:56, April 28, 2014 (UTC)
Lee's charge
  • Context for Geonosis in the intro and body. "Planet" should do.
    • Done
  • Source for the date? If it is not explicitly said in the game that the battle took place in 22 BBY, you need a reference.
    • Pretty sure the game mentions 0 hr - geonosis at the start, would have to check though. Is that enough?
      • It would be clearer if you make a reference like you did for his birthdate.
        • Done
  • Mention his birthdate in the bio.
    • Already there
      • You mention that he was born on Kamino but not when.
        • Ah, my bad, fixed
  • Take a look at the quote description and change the error. Boss's number is RC-1138 right?
    • It's both, though most referenced as RC-1138. I think the only canon mention of RC-01/138 is at the start of the game. Changed to RC-1138 anyway.
  • Full title in the infobox, please.
    • Not sure what you mean, so added the full name as it appears for the article.
      • Sorry, "name" would have been clearer.
  • Place of death missing in the infobox too.
  • Clone Commander Lee Talk 09:43, April 3, 2014 (UTC)
  • You don't need to source the intro.
    • Refs removed
  • (First appearance) tag is missing.
    • Added
  • You should link gunship to LAAT/i. Also find a way to link to clone trooper and Sexes in the intro. Suggestion: He was deployed and replace "he was killed" with the clone trooper was killed. Clone Commander Lee Talk 11:35, April 5, 2014 (UTC)
    • How's that?
  • Also, please reload your infobox. Clone Commander Lee Talk 11:36, April 5, 2014 (UTC)
    • I don't know what this means? :( Manoof (talk) 22:56, April 5, 2014 (UTC)
      • Click on the source link in at the bottom of the infobox. The link will lead you to an infobox. Remove the old one and fill out the new one. Clone Commander Lee Talk 23:08, April 5, 2014 (UTC)
  • You refer to him as "he" three time in the bio. Please change at least one of those. Clone Commander Lee Talk 00:44, April 6, 2014 (UTC)
  • IMHO "out" needs to be decapitalized in the quote? Clone Commander Lee Talk 10:06, April 6, 2014 (UTC)
    • Agreed, fixedManoof (talk) 04:16, April 7, 2014 (UTC)
  • The clone trooper was a male Human clone of the Mandalorian bounty hunter, Jango Fett. Cloned sometime before 22 BBY: Look at the GA objections. :P
    • Done like the others
  • Could you give a little bit context for the Geonosian in the intro. Clone Commander Lee Talk 13:17, April 7, 2014 (UTC)
    • Context as in who the geonosian is or what he did? Manoof (talk) 02:27, April 9, 2014 (UTC)
SE
  • In the third sentence of the bio, can you switch up some of the in's?
    • How's that?
  • Can you link to the unidentified Geonosian in the body? Supreme Emperor (talk) 02:57, April 9, 2014 (UTC)
    • Gah, missed it, thanks! Manoof (talk) 04:45, April 9, 2014 (UTC)
  • Can you also switch up some of the "him"'s in the last sentence of the bio? Supreme Emperor (talk) 04:50, April 14, 2014 (UTC)
Cadeth
  • References go after commas and other punctuation. "... [[Kamino/Legends|Kamino]]<ref name="Enc" />," should be [[Kamino/Legends|Kamino]],<ref name="Enc" />"
    • Not sure why i did that, fixed
  • Just citing "Encyclopedia (StarWars.com)" is unacceptable. Please look at other clone trooper status articles and use the correct citation.
    • Better?
  • You need to mention his heritage in the intro, and his species in both the intro and body, which will push it over 250. Please take this to the GAN.
    • Not sure what you mean, a brief history of the clones or a mention of how the republic went in the battle of geonosis or something else?
  • 22 BBY should be linked in the infobox.
    • Fixed
  • I'm not saying you have to, but it might be useful to create a Category:Unidentified clone troopers category from the contents of the clone troopers category. Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 04:22, April 23, 2014 (UTC)
    • Might get onto that when i get a chance
Corey Crawford
  • Fact tag in the bio
    • Got it
  • You say that the Geonosian took the clone and threw him off the gunship. The intro, however, reads as if he was killed onboard the gunship. See what you could do to fix this. JangFett (Talk) 13:43, April 28, 2014 (UTC)
    • Hope thats better Manoof (talk) 01:57, May 1, 2014 (UTC)

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