Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Unidentified Sullustan Jedi (battle droids)

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Commander Code-8 ^{G'day, mate} 01:28, March 29, 2013 (UTC)
So many GCW Jedi and battle droids. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 02:28, March 29, 2013 (UTC)
Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 03:17, March 29, 2013 (UTC)
501st dogma^(talk) 16:02, March 29, 2013 (UTC)
~Savage 13:33, April 6, 2013 (UTC)

Object

~~Alphabetize categories.~~ 501st dogma^(talk) 11:28, March 29, 2013 (UTC)
- Done.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 15:21, March 29, 2013 (UTC)
Bob
- Again, I think you need separate sentences on his clothing and his physical appearance; the former presumably changed, but the latter not so much. You should also indicate that "At the time of the battle..." for his clothing, so as not to imply that he never changed clothes.
- ~~Seems that he's getting a second wind in this image. Mention that? ~Savage 11:37, March 29, 2013 (UTC)~~
  - Both done.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 15:21, March 29, 2013 (UTC)
    - ~~"Gaining a second wind" is an idiomatic expression and shouldn't be interpreted literally. Can you reword? ~Savage 11:17, April 5, 2013 (UTC)~~
      - Done.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 15:59, April 5, 2013 (UTC)
- ~~Bit more! The opening sentence is redundant; we essentially hear that "A Jedi ... trained as a Jedi." Can you reword? ~Savage 11:15, April 1, 2013 (UTC)~~
  - Fixed.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 17:34, April 1, 2013 (UTC)
Emperor

Can you reword the first line a bit? Currently, it sounds like it refers to all Sullustans. Supreme Emperor (talk) 03:19, April 3, 2013 (UTC)
- Would "Sullustan individual" work?—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 01:26, April 4, 2013 (UTC)
  - That would work. Supreme Emperor (talk) 04:52, April 6, 2013 (UTC)
    - Reworked.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 09:50, April 6, 2013 (UTC)

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