- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a comprehensive article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Unidentified Sith commander
- Nominated by: Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 09:50, October 21, 2011 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Goes with the Battle of Ord Ibanna
(2 ECs/2 Users/4 Total)
Support
- Clone Commander Lee Talk 12:26, October 21, 2011 (UTC)
- Good work, Trayus.--Cal Jedi
(Personal Comm Channel) 04:55, October 22, 2011 (UTC) 
—Axinal Convocation Chamber 01:05, October 25, 2011 (UTC)- Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 16:03, October 25, 2011 (UTC)
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I think that you should mention the dates in the body of the article, and maybe add in a link to the planet.--Cal Jedi (Personal Comm Channel) 04:27, October 22, 2011 (UTC)
- Done and done.
Also, I think that you should switch the infobox to say something like "skies above Ord Ibanna" or "Brema sector" or something. Right now, the infobox sounds like he died on Ord Ibanna, rather than above it.--Cal Jedi (Personal Comm Channel) 04:29, October 22, 2011 (UTC)
- I added "over," only because I don't know if the battle was in the atmosphere or in orbit. Thanks for the review! Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 04:52, October 22, 2011 (UTC)
- Exiled Jedi
Shouldn't there be a behind the scenes section?- Of course; I can't believe I forgot that.
What exactly does "Force-insensitive" mean? If it means that the person was not force-sensitive then I do not think that the article needs this.- Well, if "insensitive" means "not sensitive," then it's a pretty safe assumption that "not force-sensitive" is the meaning. :P And I included this because of the social dynamics in the Empire—Force-insensitive Imperials were considered to be inferior to the Sith, so it's important to highlight the differences between Kilran and his predecessor.
Shouldn't the article be in Category:Individuals of unidentified species and Category:Individuals of unspecified gender?--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 17:44, October 22, 2011 (UTC)
- Yup. Added. Thanks for the review. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 18:10, October 22, 2011 (UTC)
- Axinal
I won't make a big deal of this, but I think I'd rather see the phrase "non-Force-sensitive" rather than "Force-insensitive." Unless, of course, the latter phrase is used somewhere in canon.—Axinal Convocation Chamber 17:46, October 24, 2011 (UTC)- I think it has been....somewhere. But I couldn't begin to guess where. I've made the change, but I will say that I was avoiding "non-Force-sensitive" because the "word, hyphen, word, hyphen, word" pattern drives me nuts. C'est la vie. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 00:50, October 25, 2011 (UTC)
- I can empathize with that; like I said, it's not a big deal, so if someone requests you change it back for whatever reason, don't worry about losing my support. Nice work!—Axinal Convocation Chamber 01:05, October 25, 2011 (UTC)
- I think it has been....somewhere. But I couldn't begin to guess where. I've made the change, but I will say that I was avoiding "non-Force-sensitive" because the "word, hyphen, word, hyphen, word" pattern drives me nuts. C'est la vie. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 00:50, October 25, 2011 (UTC)
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