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Unidentified Aqualish governor
- Nominated by: LordMominutiae (talk) 22:44, October 4, 2020 (UTC)
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Fan26 (Talk) 16:43, October 11, 2020 (UTC)- Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 16:58, October 11, 2020 (UTC)
- OOM 224 ༼༽{talk}༼༽ 15:16, October 12, 2020 (UTC)
- TK-462 (talk) 14:03, October 13, 2020 (UTC)
- UberSoldat93
(talk) 14:10, October 13, 2020 (UTC)
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Fan
The bit of extra context regarding what Ventress was doing at the award ceremony is unnecessary and makes that sentence way too long.- Removed. LordMominutiae (talk) 14:35, October 5, 2020 (UTC)
Does Dark Disciple actually directly say it was based off of the unfinished TCW arc and provide the show's writers? If not, that bit in the BtS requires another source to back it up.Fan26 (Talk) 14:07, October 5, 2020 (UTC)- The novel itself says that it was based on unfinished TCW episodes and it states who originally wrote the arc, however I double-checked and it does not state the episode length (supposedly, according to the Dark Disciple page, the novel gives the eight original episode titles, but I can't find them in there). I've added two new references in specifically mentioning it was eight episodes and a single arc altogether. LordMominutiae (talk) 14:35, October 5, 2020 (UTC)
- Sorry for jumping in, but the two refs aren't necessary since the physical edition of the book lists all the episodes of the TCW arc it was based on as well as the script writers. - - -OOM 224 ༼༽{talk}༼༽ 15:49, October 5, 2020 (UTC)
- The novel itself says that it was based on unfinished TCW episodes and it states who originally wrote the arc, however I double-checked and it does not state the episode length (supposedly, according to the Dark Disciple page, the novel gives the eight original episode titles, but I can't find them in there). I've added two new references in specifically mentioning it was eight episodes and a single arc altogether. LordMominutiae (talk) 14:35, October 5, 2020 (UTC)
OOM
The last sentence is reads a bit awkward. Can you please adjust it?- - -OOM 224 ༼༽{talk}༼༽ 14:34, October 12, 2020 (UTC)- Does that look any better? LordMominutiae (talk) 14:47, October 12, 2020 (UTC)
- Oops, it's the last sentence of the first paragraph I have an issue with, but indeed the second paragraph reads better now. - - -OOM 224 ༼༽{talk}༼༽ 15:02, October 12, 2020 (UTC)
- Split it into two sentences and changed a few words—read any better now? LordMominutiae (talk) 15:06, October 12, 2020 (UTC)
- Better. - - -OOM 224 ༼༽{talk}༼༽ 15:16, October 12, 2020 (UTC)
- Split it into two sentences and changed a few words—read any better now? LordMominutiae (talk) 15:06, October 12, 2020 (UTC)
- Oops, it's the last sentence of the first paragraph I have an issue with, but indeed the second paragraph reads better now. - - -OOM 224 ༼༽{talk}༼༽ 15:02, October 12, 2020 (UTC)
- Does that look any better? LordMominutiae (talk) 14:47, October 12, 2020 (UTC)
Comments
- Just checking you are fine with this copy-edit. Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 12:59, October 9, 2020 (UTC)
- Second edit looks fine. As for "served," the reason I used that is because it's used very often with regard to real-life politicians. For example, Abraham Lincoln's Wikipedia page says he "served as the 16th president of the United States." LordMominutiae (talk) 13:46, October 9, 2020 (UTC)
- Ok I'll reverse the "worked" part then. Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 17:21, October 9, 2020 (UTC)
- Second edit looks fine. As for "served," the reason I used that is because it's used very often with regard to real-life politicians. For example, Abraham Lincoln's Wikipedia page says he "served as the 16th president of the United States." LordMominutiae (talk) 13:46, October 9, 2020 (UTC)
Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 12:19, October 15, 2020 (UTC)