Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Tredwall

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Tredwall

  • Nominated by: Imperial Information Office AV-6R7Crew Pit 21:12, August 18, 2017 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:

(2 ECs/3 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. Ayrehead02 (talk) 17:34, August 21, 2017 (UTC)
  2. ECvote Imperators II(Talk) 18:38, August 21, 2017 (UTC)
  3. Cevan IMPpress (talk) 17:32, August 27, 2017 (UTC)
  4. <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 01:22, August 31, 2017 (UTC)
  5. ECvote 1358 (Talk) 20:45, September 3, 2017 (UTC)

Object

Imperators II
  • "picking on gullible marks" - "pick on" is definitely not the same as "pick up". Please change this.
  • Actually, can you maybe paraphrase that whole last clause so that it's not nearly word-for-word?
  • I think you should add that Tredwall was mentioned in the Cynabar's Droid Datalog. Imperators II(Talk) 21:42, August 18, 2017 (UTC)
  • Can we get context for Selonia and maybe the Vohai Unirail? Imperators II(Talk) 07:07, August 19, 2017 (UTC)
    • Added context for Selonia, but for the Unirail, it would likely add an entire sentence to the article that has absolutely nothing to do with its subject. - Imperial Information Office AV-6R7Crew Pit 17:54, August 21, 2017 (UTC)
Ayrehead
  • I'm not sure having two distinct quotes together is really necessary especially since it makes the quote so long. Ayrehead02 (talk) 07:35, August 20, 2017 (UTC)
    • Removed the second quote. - Imperial Information Office AV-6R7Crew Pit 16:40, August 21, 2017 (UTC)
Ecks Dee
  • The opening sentence is too long. Generally the first sentence in the intro should be short and to-the-point. I count no less than six verbs in the sentence (no, there's no hard limit but it's a good indicator). You could probably fix it by swapping out the "company" for "droid manufacturer" and add a full stop before reference [1]. 1358 (Talk) 19:34, September 3, 2017 (UTC)

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