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Tooka (Jedi)

  • Nominated by: Jedi Order ImpacticForce (Talk) 22:58, 19 January 2021 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Another tiny character from KOTOR.

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Support

  1. GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Winterz (talk) 18:51, 26 January 2021 (UTC)
  2. ECvote OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 07:45, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
  3. Immi Thrax (talk) 07:55, 3 March 2021 (UTC)
  4. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 03:52, 8 March 2021 (UTC)
  5. ECvote Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:56, 10 March 2021 (UTC)
  6. ECvote UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 18:00, 11 March 2021 (UTC)

Object

Macaroni
Winterz
  • What are the municipal authorities? Was the "municipal" term used? It sounds like a shiny redlink to be filled. ;)
    • They did use "municipal authorities." I'll fill that redlink. Jedi Order ImpacticForce (Talk) 05:58, 26 January 2021 (UTC)
  • Provide quest details in the bts. GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Winterz (talk) 03:38, 26 January 2021 (UTC)
    • Both objections adressed. I had difficulty wording the BTS section, let me know how it looks. Jedi Order ImpacticForce (Talk) 06:25, 26 January 2021 (UTC)
UberSoldat
  • Can "a certain location" be elaborated upon? UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 18:12, 28 January 2021 (UTC)
    • I added some context, does it need more? Jedi Order ImpacticForce (Talk) 03:21, 29 January 2021 (UTC)
      • Where is this Ancient Grove? Please specify. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 07:03, 29 January 2021 (UTC)
        • Added. There's not much more I can add, there isn't much context given as to the Grove's location. Jedi Order ImpacticForce (Talk) 16:06, 29 January 2021 (UTC)
  • Please spell out "Garang" instead of hiding it in a pipelink.
  • "Tooka was dispatched to the cantina and successfully ended the fight, restoring order." Restoring order to what?
  • Can you create Tooka (disambiguation) and link it here? UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 18:05, 29 January 2021 (UTC)
  • Grammatical error in the quote's last sentence. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 11:41, 30 January 2021 (UTC)
  • Is that quote the only time the character is mentioned? UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 14:41, 9 March 2021 (UTC)
    • If it is, then it's speculation to say that the character was dispatched from the Dantooine Enclave. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 12:07, 10 March 2021 (UTC)
OOM
  • I doubt The New Essential Chronology gives the date for the cantina scuffle. Please modify the reference note to something along the lines of "The New Essential Chronology places the events of KotOR 1, which includes the cantina scuffle involving Tooka, to 3956 BBY."
  • "him" should be pipelinked to Sexes/Legends
  • There should be more context for Nettic's death. Currently, it seems as though he died during the scuffle in the cantina. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 09:16, 10 February 2021 (UTC)
  • "The quest can be refused, dropped, or the mention avoided" I don't know what "the mention" here is referring to. Please reword the sentence. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 11:39, 14 February 2021 (UTC)
    • I reworded it. Is it easier to understand now? Jedi Order ImpacticForce (Talk) 03:04, 15 February 2021 (UTC)
      • That's better
  • The links to the two archives should be removed since the word "archives" does not relate to the Coruscant Jedi Temple archives, and the word "capital" does not refer to the Garang archives.
  • Is a separate reference note for Bolook being a Jedi Knight necessary?
  • Operating on my assumtion that Revan specifically asked the droid to access the information on Tooka, the sentence should be reworded to clearly reflect this instead of leaving open the possibility that the droid happened to be accessing the information while Revan conducted his investigation. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 17:25, 20 February 2021 (UTC)
    • Fixed all. I added that reference because the old page called him a Jedi Master, but it doesn't serve much purpose now that the whole article has been rewritten. Jedi Order ImpacticForce (Talk) 21:28, 20 February 2021 (UTC)
  • "The incident was recorded in archives both at Garang and the Enclave." Incorrect grammar; please revise
  • "An information droid on the scene was approached by Revan, who asked about Nettic's relationships. The droid thus accessed the data regarding the cantina scuffle, including Tooka's involvement." On should be changed to at for grammar, and you should elaborate on the specific location of the droid; simply saying "an information droid at the scene" is not enough. Also, how did the droid access the data? OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 21:44, 20 February 2021 (UTC)
    • Fixed the grammar problems, I think. (Grammarly doesn't say anything) I added context on the droids location. There wasn't much I could add on how the droid accessed the data, since it kinda just tells you. Is it speculation to say it accessed it remotely? Jedi Order ImpacticForce (Talk) 02:32, 21 February 2021 (UTC)
      • Grammarly isn't be best at catching grammatical errors :P // I've tweaked the wording for clarity. Regarding how the droid accesed the data, yes, it's speculation, but I've removed the word "remotely."
  • Since the behind the scenes states that Revan could have avoided investigating Nettic's death, {{Gamemechanics}} (and {{Endgame}}) should be added to the relevent portion of the article. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 21:51, 24 February 2021 (UTC)

Comments

  • I have removed some redundancy from the Bts. Hope that's okay with you. GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Winterz (talk) 18:51, 26 January 2021 (UTC)

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 18:01, 11 March 2021 (UTC)