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Thara Nyende's mother
- Nominated by: Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 19:08, May 16, 2020 (UTC)
- Nomination comments:
(5 ECs/1 Users/6 Total)
Support
—spookywillowwtalk 22:12, May 16, 2020 (UTC)- Fan26 (Talk) 15:23, May 17, 2020 (UTC)
- Corellian Premier
The Force will be with you always 16:35, May 17, 2020 (UTC) - UberSoldat93 (talk) 20:08, May 17, 2020 (UTC)
- QuiGonJinn (Talk) 09:21, May 18, 2020 (UTC)
- Zed42 (talk) 20:30, May 18, 2020 (UTC)
Object
Spooky
I believe the first sentence reads structurally incorrect 'The female individual was the mother of...'; may be better off as 'The mother of the human Thara Neyende was...'- I would normally proceed with this by there's no info to follow on from "was". How should I proceed? Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 21:18, May 16, 2020 (UTC)
- Sorry, should've specified. "The mother of the human Thara Neyende was a female individual who lived during the Imperial Era." would work. Given she's a reason for Neyende's enlistment, that would mean she'd be alive in that frame. The part about Neyende being a resident/her homeworld, and the context for Sullust, could be refitted into the sentence after.—spookywillowwtalk 21:57, May 16, 2020 (UTC)
- Ok sorted. Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 22:03, May 16, 2020 (UTC)
- Sorry, should've specified. "The mother of the human Thara Neyende was a female individual who lived during the Imperial Era." would work. Given she's a reason for Neyende's enlistment, that would mean she'd be alive in that frame. The part about Neyende being a resident/her homeworld, and the context for Sullust, could be refitted into the sentence after.—spookywillowwtalk 21:57, May 16, 2020 (UTC)
- I would normally proceed with this by there's no info to follow on from "was". How should I proceed? Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 21:18, May 16, 2020 (UTC)
Mother, also, should not be linked as it's bolded.Even if not in this novel, Sullust can certainly be established to be a planet by other means, rather than just using world and pipelinking it to planet.In the last sentence, I'm inferring that 'support' means to support financially. I think what she's supporting them for should be explicitly stated.—spookywillowwtalk 19:42, May 16, 2020 (UTC)- All three addressed. Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 21:18, May 16, 2020 (UTC)
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Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 20:30, May 18, 2020 (UTC)