Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Thanium star-glaive

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Thanium star-glaive

~~Page x(?) has a picture of a taskforce including star-glaives over Felucia. Mention of that should probably be added.~~
- I missed the little caption giving the location, good catch! Added. Ayrehead02 (talk) 01:39, July 10, 2014 (UTC)
~~Page 7 has some info stating that the glaives were mixed and matched in squadrons with the other ships. Make sure there is nothing else you missed.~~
- I thought "fielded alongside" covered that but I guess I wasn't specific enough, changed. I didn't add some of the other information as it does not specifically state that its refering to star-glaives just parts of Xim's fleet. Ayrehead02 (talk) 01:39, July 10, 2014 (UTC)
  - That seems the right thing to do. I was just asking if there was any more info on the glaive itself.
~~The image is poor quality. Could you try getting a better one?~~ 501st dogma^(talk) 18:36, July 9, 2014 (UTC)
- Changed to the other image, better? Ayrehead02 (talk) 01:39, July 10, 2014 (UTC)
  - Pretty pretty. 501st dogma^(talk) 12:54, July 10, 2014 (UTC)

Issue numbers for Insider should not be italicized.
Again, Pre-Republic era.
Give dates for Xim Week and Warfare.
"during its conflict against the Hutt species." Firstly, not sure about the "its"; I think a he would be better. Secondly, "conflict against" is not proper grammar; it should be "war against" or "conflict with".
"The battle, including the star-glaives involvement," You're missing an apostrophe, and the structure's very wonky. Something like "The events of the battle were later recorded in the..." The mention of the star-glaives is unnecessary, as it's given in the quote.
Reading the Insider article, the BTS can and should be greatly expanded using the info about Fullwood's design process and reasonings for the Xim ships. Cade Calrayn 16:17, July 21, 2014 (UTC)