Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Thakwaa

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Thakwaa

  • Nominated by: Zed42 (talk) 21:23, July 11, 2019 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: I was thinking of nominating this some time ago, but then it received an unexpected mention in a novel.

(4 ECs/0 Users/4 Total)

Support

  1. ECvote TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 22:37, July 13, 2019 (UTC)
  2. ECvote Imperators II(Talk) 22:41, July 13, 2019 (UTC)
  3. ECvote QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 17:10, July 14, 2019 (UTC)
  4. ECvote Fan26 (Talk) 12:06, July 16, 2019 (UTC)

Object

QGJ
  • Unless something along those lines is outright stated in the book in some form, I would just remove this part, as it sounds like OOU point of view. Nothing else of note ocurred during Tensent's time on Thakwaa QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 12:48, July 12, 2019 (UTC)
    • When asked what happened on the next day of his visit, Tensent says "Nothing interesting. We got offworld a few days later…" so I thought it was best to include that. I could reword it to say something like "According to Tensent, nothing interesting occurred during his time on Thakwaa" if that's better. Zed42 (talk) 18:40, July 12, 2019 (UTC)
      • If I may chime in, I'm in favor of your suggested rewording. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 21:46, July 13, 2019 (UTC)
        • I've gone ahead and changed it. Zed42 (talk) 22:13, July 13, 2019 (UTC)
Imp
  • "to create an ointment to protect against flies" — please rephrase this to avoid the repetition of "to." Imperators II(Talk) 22:10, July 12, 2019 (UTC)
  • "which had the side effect of giving him rashes" — grammatically it isn't unambiguous to whom is "him" referring, please revise. Imperators II(Talk) 22:10, July 12, 2019 (UTC)
    • Reworded the sentence, both issues should be fixed now. Zed42 (talk) 22:41, July 12, 2019 (UTC)
Anil
  • I think you can add that the world had plants and flies to the infobox. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 21:46, July 13, 2019 (UTC)
    • Adding "plants" in the infobox field solely meant for plants seems somewhat redundant, but I've added it. Zed42 (talk) 22:13, July 13, 2019 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 12:08, July 16, 2019 (UTC)