Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Talivar

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Talivar

• Nominated by: NBDani (they/them)^{Yeager's Repairs} 03:32, 30 April 2023 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Dani: "Where is Talivar?" LFL: "It seems in our ignoring of Star Wars Resistance, we left it off the Timelines maps." Me: "Nooooooo!"
• Date Archived: 19:44, 2 May 2023 (UTC)
• Final word count: 119 words (0 introduction, 90 body, 29 behind the scenes)
• WookieeProject (optional): Wookieepedia:WookieeProject Resistance, WP:AST

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Support

1. Lewisr (talk) 05:22, 30 April 2023 (UTC)
2. Imperators II^(Talk) 07:06, 30 April 2023 (UTC)
3. BloodOfIrizi ^(Syndicure) 17:48, 30 April 2023 (UTC)
4. Fan26 (Talk) 18:16, 30 April 2023 (UTC)
5. :fireball: —spookywilloww^talk 03:37, 1 May 2023 (UTC)

Object

Ziara

• context for Flix at mention of his mother
  • Done. NBDani (they/them)^{Yeager's Repairs} 03:52, 30 April 2023 (UTC)
• context for Okra
  • Thought I did this, but it was on another article. Oops XD NBDani (they/them)^{Yeager's Repairs} 03:52, 30 April 2023 (UTC)
• is gorg supposed to be lowercase?
  • The subtitles in the series have it as lowercase. NBDani (they/them)^{Yeager's Repairs} 03:52, 30 April 2023 (UTC)
• the second sentence is a bit of a run on, any chance of splitting it up?
  • Split! NBDani (they/them)^{Yeager's Repairs} 03:52, 30 April 2023 (UTC)
• the quote says they were being "sent" to Talivar - by whom? think it should be mentioned in the body BloodOfIrizi ^(Syndicure) 03:39, 30 April 2023 (UTC)
  • Did the 2nd sentence rework help clear this up? NBDani (they/them)^{Yeager's Repairs} 03:52, 30 April 2023 (UTC)
    • indeed, looking back that may have been a comprehension error on ny part haha
      • It never hurts to further clarify NBDani (they/them)^{Yeager's Repairs} 04:32, 30 April 2023 (UTC)
• final nitpick: id like to see it identified as the "Colussus supertanker fuel depot" - or any variation you deem fit - so as not to use "station" 2x in the sentence BloodOfIrizi ^(Syndicure) 04:26, 30 April 2023 (UTC)
  • I like to variety it up between Resistance noms, but you're right this instance should use Supertanker. Fixed. NBDani (they/them)^{Yeager's Repairs} 04:32, 30 April 2023 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 19:43, 2 May 2023 (UTC)