Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Singing stone

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Singing stone

  • Nominated by: OOM 224 ༼༽{talk}༼༽ 08:24, October 12, 2020 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Another CAN attempt. This one shouldn't exceed the word limit.

(0 ECs/1 Users/1 Total)

(Votes required: 2 EC vote(s) required to reach minimum. Additional 2 user or 1 EC vote required to pass.)

Support

  1. LordMominutiae (talk) 15:18, October 12, 2020 (UTC)

Object

LordMominutiae
  • Do you think the image used on the Yoda's quarters page would be better suited for this page? Simply because it provides a larger view of the quarters (it's not as if the current picture shows the singing stones and that other image does not, either).
    • I was going for the TCW aesthetic and the candles in the foreground, which I found more fitting for the article. However, I could change it to the Episode III image if you want to.
      • Gotcha. It's probably not a big deal at all. LordMominutiae (talk) 15:18, October 12, 2020 (UTC)
  • As I was informed in my CA nom for the Raxian Humanitarian Award, the TCW Chronological Order shouldn't be used to date the events of the Utapau arc, Dark Disciple, or Son of Dathomir, as those are no longer present in the current version of the order. Feel free to take a look at the Raxian award page to see how I changed the date reference to account for this. LordMominutiae (talk) 14:44, October 12, 2020 (UTC)
UberSoldat
  • I don't believe "Coruscant Jedi Temple" is one of the proper names for the temple. Should be "Jedi Temple on Coruscant." Coruscant will need context here of course.
  • "...after Vos was sent to assassinate the Sith Lord Darth Tyranus along with the Sith's former acolyte, Asajj Ventress." This sounds like Vos was going to assassinate Ventress too. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 19:44, October 16, 2020 (UTC)
  • "The Jedi Obi-Wan Kenobi found the music emanating from the fountain deeply soothing, and noted that it resembled sounds between that of a chime and a stringed instrument." Did this occur before 19 BBY? UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 19:45, October 16, 2020 (UTC)
    • All reworded. The novel only says Obi-Wan usually found it soothing. - - -OOM 224 ༼༽{talk}༼༽ 16:25, October 17, 2020 (UTC)
Winterz
  • Quotes?
  • The "however" after the paragraph feels weird as the paragraph defines the end of the "first part". Then you start a new one with "however" and that can probably use better wording.
  • You introduce Obi-Wan as a Jedi, then you follow as his fellow "Jedi Master". You should use Jedi Master for Obi-Wan the first time.
    • All addressed.
  • Bts mention about its Legends counterpart. GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Winterz (talk) 02:31, 25 October 2020 (UTC)
    • The subject was first mentioned in Canon, which means a bts mention of the Legends counterpart is not necessary. But since it was pictured in Legends and not in Canon, I've expanded the bts section accordingly. - - -OOM 224 ༼༽{talk}༼༽ 05:53, 25 October 2020 (UTC)

Comments

  • After doing a word count, the article sits at 338 words. Without the TOR info, it sits at 292. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 06:37, 25 October 2020 (UTC)
    • Oh well, forgot the BTS counted. I request for the nom to be taken down then. Thanks again! - - -OOM 224 ༼༽{talk}༼༽ 07:06, 25 October 2020 (UTC)