Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Plun Kil

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Plun Kil

  • Nominated by: 501st dogma 18:32, December 30, 2011 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:

(2 ECs/4 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Clone Commander Lee Talk 16:06, January 2, 2012 (UTC)
  2. ECvoteNice job working through all those objections.—Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 14:50, January 4, 2012 (UTC)
  3. Master Kil. Heh. Corellian PremierRobotechAll along the watchtower 03:44, January 8, 2012 (UTC)
  4. ~501st TupTcgaotc symbol(Communications) 23:44, January 14, 2012 (UTC)
  5. Imperators II(Talk) 12:18, January 15, 2012 (UTC)
  6. ECvote Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 13:17, January 15, 2012 (UTC)

Object

  1. Lee's charge
    • Gender is missing in the body.
    • Maybe a little bit context on the Clone Wars.
    • The BtS should be written in past form.
    • Concept art for Master Kil was drawn by Kilian Plunkett. Not a full sentence.
    • Please find a synonym for Kil in one instance in the bio (e.g. Besalisk Jedi Master).
    • BtS: Fourth Season of what?
    • Hair and eye color as well as his affiliation to the Republic have to be mentioned outside the infobox.
    • Good work. 19:02, December 30, 2011 (UTC)
  2. Cal Jedi
    • Lee already got my objections, so please just note my copy-edit.--Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 19:26, December 30, 2011 (UTC)
    • On more thing: Some mention in the body about his clothing and lightsabers would be good.--Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 19:31, December 30, 2011 (UTC)
      • Done--501st dogma 16:28, January 2, 2012 (UTC)
        • On most CAs that have passed, it is proper procedure to say something to the effect of "on at least one occasion he wore..." That way, it is not speculation in implying that he always wore that clothing. Also, I think you need to explain the clothing better, I think, rather than just saying that he wore "standard Jedi attire." You could just chop that part out probably since it is rather ambiguous anyway. Instead, you could describe his clothing some, like "On at least one occasion, he wore a tan and white shirt" or whatever it would be to fit him. See what you can do, then I'll take another look.—Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 23:39, January 2, 2012 (UTC)
          • Ok, I've improved his clothing description, though it is all in one sentence.--501st dogma 17:00, January 3, 2012 (UTC)
    • "He was also known to use four lightsabers" - Known by whom? I think this could be better stated if written more like the clothing part. Something like "On occasion, he carried four lightsabers..."
    • "sturdy belt" - Does it say anywhere in the source that it is "sturdy?" If not, then it's speculation, and that word will have to be removed.—Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 22:39, January 3, 2012 (UTC)
      • Ok, I've removed sturdy and fixed the lightsaber sentence.--501st dogma 14:09, January 4, 2012 (UTC)
  3. Exiled Jedi
    • Please fill the "skin" field in the infobox with his skin color.
    • You also need to add this to the body of the article.
    • Since you mentioned his shirt and pants, it seems like you should mention his sandals.
    • --Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 21:42, January 14, 2012 (UTC)

Comments

  1. Green lightsaber
    • If anyones wondering about the green lightsaber, it can only be seen here. [1] (slide 3 on trivia)--501st dogma 21:02, December 30, 2011 (UTC)
    • also, please do not try to get a picture of him with all of his lightsabers. This is because it has already been tryed but just caused his portrait to look squished, and still did not include all of the lightsabers in the image.--501st dogma 22:52, December 30, 2011 (UTC)
      • I disagree -- the image in the infobox now makes him look like an amputee or something. I think you should either include the full-body image from the slide (even if it looks squished) or crop in to only his head and shoulders, like most character articles do. If you go the latter route, you could include the full concept art slide in his BTS if there's room. ~SavageBOB sig 16:15, January 2, 2012 (UTC)
        • Ok, I've created a better portrait though I do not think the full picture will fit in the BtS. Also, the same picture twice in on small article would kind of look weird, would'nt it?--501st dogma 16:25, January 2, 2012 (UTC)
          • Looks good! ~SavageBOB sig 22:45, January 16, 2012 (UTC)