Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Petrish Imglor

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Petrish Imglor

Nominated by: - Thannus (DFaceG) (he/him) (talk) 23:25, 6 September 2023 (UTC)
Nomination comments:
Date Archived: 01:12, 16 September 2023 (UTC)
Final word count: 115 words (0 introduction, 74 body, 41 behind the scenes)
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Support

JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 20:41, 14 September 2023 (UTC)
Looks Good Rxxxxxxxxxx (talk) 13:08, 15 September 2023 (UTC)
Lewisr (talk) 22:07, 15 September 2023 (UTC)
Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 01:09, 16 September 2023 (UTC)

Object

Lew

~~Jedi Order is infobox exclusive~~
- Fixed. - Thannus (DFaceG) (he/him) (talk) 00:26, 7 September 2023 (UTC)
~~You could add the era~~ Lewisr (talk) 00:09, 7 September 2023 (UTC)
- Added. - Thannus (DFaceG) (he/him) (talk) 00:26, 7 September 2023 (UTC)
~~'recognizing some of them from the hue of their glow' I think this should be noted since it's a bit more than just sensing Petrish's presence~~
- Added. - Thannus (DFaceG) (he/him) (talk) 21:37, 15 September 2023 (UTC)
~~The fact Rooper describes Petrish as young should be included~~ Lewisr (talk) 16:56, 15 September 2023 (UTC)
- Added. - Thannus (DFaceG) (he/him) (talk) 21:37, 15 September 2023 (UTC)

rxx

~~I believe the reference for date could be reworded to sound clearer? Also maybe change the word 'around' so it is not repeated twice.~~
- I'm not really seeing a way to reword it. Also the use of "around" twice in the ref is necessary as it could imply an exact in either place otherwise. - Thannus (DFaceG) (he/him) (talk) 17:09, 14 September 2023 (UTC)
  - ~~Instead of around you could put e.g "c. 379". My main concern is that Shield of the Jedi is mentioned 3 times which makes it sound repetitive.~~ Rxxxxxxxxxx (talk) 01:58, 15 September 2023 (UTC)
    - Further rephrased. With the Shield of the Jedi mentions specificity is kind of necessary otherwise the source's words could be conflated, but I've tweaked it in a way I think it should work. - Thannus (DFaceG) (he/him) (talk) 05:59, 15 September 2023 (UTC)
~~"after Nitani turned fifteen" Add 'years old' to the end of this aswell.~~
- Added. - Thannus (DFaceG) (he/him) (talk) 17:09, 14 September 2023 (UTC)
  - ~~sorry, didnt see "Rooper Nitani is eighteen". I recommend changing this to years old, and optional whether to include it with the fifteen~~ Rxxxxxxxxxx (talk) 01:58, 15 September 2023 (UTC)
    - Further revised. - Thannus (DFaceG) (he/him) (talk) 05:59, 15 September 2023 (UTC)
~~"The Jedi had ascended to their rank" imo it sounds like you are referring to the Jedi Order instead of Petrish~~ Rxxxxxxxxxx (talk) 01:07, 14 September 2023 (UTC)
- Rephrased. - Thannus (DFaceG) (he/him) (talk) 17:09, 14 September 2023 (UTC)

Anil

~~I don't think that Databank entry outright says Batuu was a planet. You can perhaps source that to Timelines instead since it's already used as a refernce?~~ Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 11:34, 15 September 2023 (UTC)
- Actually, I think it can be sourced to the short story itself: "Batuu, she considered, was a beautiful world." Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 11:59, 15 September 2023 (UTC)
  - iirc don't we use "world" interchangeably? - Thannus (DFaceG) (he/him) (talk) 21:35, 15 September 2023 (UTC)
    - Yes, astro status articles assume planet=world Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 22:37, 15 September 2023 (UTC)
      - Gotcha, tweaked. - Thannus (DFaceG) (he/him) (talk) 22:57, 15 September 2023 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 01:11, 16 September 2023 (UTC)