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Pastron
- Nominated by: Samonic
(Talk) 13:40, 25 November 2022 (UTC) - Nomination comments:
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—spookywillowwtalk 23:55, 25 November 2022 (UTC)- lmk if you have any issues with my copy-edit BloodOfIrizi
(talk) 00:47, 28 November 2022 (UTC) 
LucaRoR (Talk) 12:44, 28 November 2022 (UTC)- - Thannus (DFaceG) (he/him) (talk) 01:41, 3 December 2022 (UTC)
- Dropbearemma (she/her) 04:51, 3 December 2022 (UTC)
Object
Luca
There is a double-ref in the body. I'd remove it myself, but I'm not sure if that was supposed to be another source.LucaRoR (Talk) 15:53, 25 November 2022 (UTC)
Spooky
As someone who's not read the novel, it's unclear whether the Golan was fighting on the side of the Imperials or the Storm-hairs—which subsequently makes Pastron's Imperial affiliation unclear. It's likely because of the way the sentences are broken up, as the second sentence establishes who his commandant is without specifying that fleet's enemy, who the torpedoes were aimed at, or what side of the battle's ending this character specifically was on.—spookywillowwtalk 20:25, 25 November 2022 (UTC)- It's likely because I didn't notice that "Galactic Empire" was infobox-exclusive, sigh. Pastron did not fire the torpedoes, Nills did. Tbh I think saying that Pastron activated the torpedo launchers is enough, if you insist, though, I can add that they were fired at Esva's Whisperlike fighters. Samonic (Talk) 21:29, 25 November 2022 (UTC)
- I don’t really have a preference on how it’s phrased, but I do insist Pastron’s Imperial affiliation be clarified one way or the other, as right now- saying that he activated them doesn’t say anything as to whether he’s activating them to help the Empire or to fight the Empire.—spookywillowwtalk 21:32, 25 November 2022 (UTC)
- I've reworded accordingly. Will that suffice? Samonic (Talk) 21:40, 25 November 2022 (UTC)
- Yep, much thanks.—spookywillowwtalk 23:55, 25 November 2022 (UTC)
- I've reworded accordingly. Will that suffice? Samonic
- I don’t really have a preference on how it’s phrased, but I do insist Pastron’s Imperial affiliation be clarified one way or the other, as right now- saying that he activated them doesn’t say anything as to whether he’s activating them to help the Empire or to fight the Empire.—spookywillowwtalk 21:32, 25 November 2022 (UTC)
- It's likely because I didn't notice that "Galactic Empire" was infobox-exclusive, sigh. Pastron did not fire the torpedoes, Nills did. Tbh I think saying that Pastron activated the torpedo launchers is enough, if you insist, though, I can add that they were fired at Esva's Whisperlike fighters. Samonic
Comments
Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 05:53, 3 December 2022 (UTC)