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Nanofoil
- Nominated by: Mr Star Wars Amino Republic (talk) 00:26, January 15, 2021 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: First nom of the New Year.
(2 ECs/3 Users/5 Total)
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Support
- VergenceScatter (talk) 05:56, 15 January 2021 (UTC)
- Good work!
ImpacticForce (Talk) 16:44, 19 January 2021 (UTC) - Nice job making an article out of one sentence without copy-pasting that sentence harder than it looks!) Immi Thrax (talk) 01:55, 14 February 2021 (UTC)
Objections handled via Discord OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 09:26, 17 February 2021 (UTC)- Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:33, 3 March 2021 (UTC)
Object
Vergence
Is there a way that you could avoid using the word used twice in the first sentence?VergenceScatter (talk) 04:24, 15 January 2021 (UTC)- Fixed. Mr Star Wars Amino Republic (talk) 05:36, January 15, 2021 (UTC)
UberSoldat
BTS says "mentioned" while Appearances says otherwise. Please fix this.- Fixed. Mr Star Wars Amino Republic (talk) 23:16, January 17, 2021 (UTC)
Missing audiobook.UberSoldat93
(talk) 12:15, 17 January 2021 (UTC)
- Added. Mr Star Wars Amino Republic (talk) 23:16, January 17, 2021 (UTC)
Impactic
Some context on the time period and planet could be added. ImpacticForce (Talk) 00:27, 18 January 2021 (UTC)
- We've never had to establish whether it's the Republic Era or the Imperial Era before. It seems satisfactory to say that she possessed a scarf made from nanofoil during her time at the Elphrona Outpost. For the planet, I don't know what else could be added to describe Elphrona. Mr Star Wars Amino Republic (talk) 05:49, January 18, 2021 (UTC)
- I think specifying the era here is fine as it gives the reader a timeframe for the subject's appearance. UberSoldat93 (talk) 08:24, 18 January 2021 (UTC)
- I'm not quite sure on how/where to add it to make sure that the article continues to sound nice. Mr Star Wars Amino Republic (talk) 00:47, January 19, 2021 (UTC)
- Would this work? "Nanofoil was a material used during the High Republic Era. It was included in a scarf that the Tholothian Jedi Indeera Stokes..." ImpacticForce (Talk) 02:59, 19 January 2021 (UTC)
- I guess something like that'll work. Added. Mr Star Wars Amino Republic (talk) 10:16, January 19, 2021 (UTC)
- Would this work? "Nanofoil was a material used during the High Republic Era. It was included in a scarf that the Tholothian Jedi Indeera Stokes..."
- I'm not quite sure on how/where to add it to make sure that the article continues to sound nice. Mr Star Wars Amino Republic (talk) 00:47, January 19, 2021 (UTC)
- You could add that Elphrona is in the Outer Rim, but if you don't think it's necessary, then I trust your judgement. ImpacticForce (Talk) 15:40, 18 January 2021 (UTC)
- Added. Mr Star Wars Amino Republic (talk) 00:47, January 19, 2021 (UTC)
- I think specifying the era here is fine as it gives the reader a timeframe for the subject's appearance. UberSoldat93
- We've never had to establish whether it's the Republic Era or the Imperial Era before. It seems satisfactory to say that she possessed a scarf made from nanofoil during her time at the Elphrona Outpost. For the planet, I don't know what else could be added to describe Elphrona. Mr Star Wars Amino Republic (talk) 05:49, January 18, 2021 (UTC)
Macaroni
Missing infobox ({{Substance}}).JediMasterMacaroni(Conversation) 03:37, 2 February 2021 (UTC)
- Added. Mr Star Wars Amino Republic (talk) 10:46, February 7, 2021 (UTC)
Erebus
I don't think you need to mention Nanofoil twice at the beginning of the first two sentences. Can you please change it to something like "Nanofoil was a material used during the High Republic Era. It was present in [...]"?- Fixed. Mr Star Wars Amino Republic (talk) 22:19, February 11, 2021 (UTC)
Ayrehead
You can give the year that the events occur.Ayrehead02 (talk) 14:15, 18 February 2021 (UTC)- I'm sure she's had it prior and is going to have it after, so giving the year seems unnecessary. Mr Star Wars Amino Republic (talk) 09:01, February 20, 2021 (UTC)
- This is an assumption, she could have bought it that day and lost it during the fight for all we know. If you can give a precise date you almost always should. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:28, 23 February 2021 (UTC)
- Added. Mr Star Wars Amino Republic (talk) 08:43, February 27, 2021 (UTC)
- This is an assumption, she could have bought it that day and lost it during the fight for all we know. If you can give a precise date you almost always should. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:28, 23 February 2021 (UTC)
- I'm sure she's had it prior and is going to have it after, so giving the year seems unnecessary. Mr Star Wars Amino Republic (talk) 09:01, February 20, 2021 (UTC)
I'd say that the scarf could specifically be used as a mask to protect her from dust storms.Ayrehead02 (talk) 14:15, 18 February 2021 (UTC)- Added. Mr Star Wars Amino Republic (talk) 09:01, February 20, 2021 (UTC)
Comments
- Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 10:59, 3 March 2021 (UTC)