Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Nana (Chiss)

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Nana (Chiss)

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  1. TK-462 (talk) 03:47, 5 August 2022 (UTC)

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Samonic
  • You are missing content: Nana only lasted 2 years as a caregiver, and you must include this: "“Sky-walker Che’ri, get ready,” she called. “She’s ready,” Zistalmu’s wife said. Ar’alani scowled. “Sky-walker Che’ri?” she asked pointedly. “I’m ready, Admiral,” the girl’s voice came back. Her confirmation was quieter and maybe a little more tentative than Nana’s, but it confirmed to Ar’alani that Che’ri was, indeed, ready."
    • added
  • Che'ri is not the Vigilant's skywalker.
    • she was for this mission. her being the springhawks sky-walker is irrelevant to the page. regarless, specified that was the temporary skywalker of the vigilant
  • Unnecessary to say the Chaos part, just say "helped them navigate the Unknown Regions."
    • removed
  • Missing a bullet point for the Ascendancy in the infobox.
    • added
  • You should specify that Nana asked all those aboard the Vigilant to call her Nana, which Ar'alani found annoying.
    • yep
  • Is Primea a planet? (it is) Please specify.
    • done
  • Remove Nana's physical appearance from the infobox, everything is speculation. (And if you don't think so, see Ers'ikaro, and your own Mafole. None have physical appearance in their pages.)
    • thats fair
  • Missing Category:Chiss Defense Force individuals category.
    • added
  • How is Nana an Unidentified female? Please remove that category.Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 08:18, 3 August 2022 (UTC)
  • Missing link to standard year.
    • done
  • You introduce the sky-walker's abilities, but do not name them. It wouldn't hurt to do so.
    • added
  • "She was a former caregiver for sky-walkers, young girls who had abilities which helped them navigate the Unknown Regions. She spent two years as a caregiver prior to marrying Zistalmu, maintaining a clean record during her years of service.[1]" This is too much text for what could just be "She worked as a caregiver for sky-walkers, young girls who had abilities which helped them navigate the Unknown Regions, spending two years assisting the girls for two years before marrying Zistalmu."
  • reworded
  • Full name for Zistalmu, please.
    • added
  • You need to specify that the Vigilant was a warship in its first mention, it could be a civilian transport, a missile, whatever.
    • added
  • "allowing himself to gain a presence aboard the Vigilant for a mission to collect Thrawn from the Unknown Regions planet of Primea—the capital of the Vak Combine nation." You should mention Ba'kif and Samakro's talk about Nana. Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 13:17, 5 August 2022 (UTC)
    • added lani's
      • Ar'alani's indeed :P Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 19:38, 5 August 2022 (UTC)
  • I can't believe I didn't notice this: Thrawn doesn't have any context or link. Please provide context and links for the Chiss that destroyed my beautiful Kilhorde :P You'll also need to say what was Thrawn doing at Primea. Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 15:40, 5 August 2022 (UTC)
  • Paragraph break needed in the bio.
  • "Nana was the nickname of a Chiss female who was married to Syndic Irizi'stal'mustro "Zistalmu" of the Chiss Ascendancy nation's Irizi family, " This can be changed to something like "Nana was the name assumed by a Chiss female married to the Syndic of the Chiss Ascendancy nation's Irizi family."
  • It would be nice to specify that the sky-walkers were Chiss, I think.
  • Missing link to commanding officer through "captain."
  • Missing link to hyperspace.
  • Missing link to the mission to Primea in the intro.
  • Quote needed for the bio.
  • "the Ar'alani's" Heh, Ar'alani is an individual, the the should be removed.
  • Categories should be in alphabetical order.
  • Image needed. (I recommend the Ascendancy's logo) Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 19:30, 5 August 2022 (UTC)
TK
  • Body could use sectioning, I'd recommend after the date reference.
    • hows that
  • Can the entire first paragraph be sourced to reference #2?
    • fixed
  • Primea needs context.
    • is it being a planet and being the capital of the Vak combine not enough? genuinely asking
      • I'd just add that it was a planet in the Unknown Region and source that properly. TK-462 (talk) 21:35, 4 August 2022 (UTC)
  • Please create a disambig page to include Nana, Nana Bagwa, and this article, and include the Otheruses template. TK-462 (talk) 17:04, 4 August 2022 (UTC)

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