Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Mourning Shrines

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Mourning Shrines

• Nominated by: Liverpool92 21:31, 9 December 2021 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Another Mon Cala locations nom
• WookieeProject (optional): WP:COMICS

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Support

1. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 21:28, 3 March 2022 (UTC)
2. OOM 224 17:05, 4 March 2022 (UTC)
3. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 05:52, 5 March 2022 (UTC)

Object

Luca

• Since both Gial and Aftab are Ackbar, I would suggest calling Gial Ackbar by his first name.
• "the group journeyed…" Which group?
• In the infobox, "terrain=Water?"
• We can also see some types of corals and fishes around the Shrines that could be considered flora and fauna. LucaRoR ^(Talk) 09:02, 12 December 2021 (UTC)
  • Fixed.--Liverpool92 22:12, 12 December 2021 (UTC)
• Context for the eels would be nice.
• I'm seeing a few quotes in the comic that could be used in the History section. LucaRoR ^(Talk) 15:38, 14 December 2021 (UTC)
  • Fixed but what is the policy for context for something OOU? Like its one thing to add context for a bantha but kinda weird for something like a horse or a eel.--Liverpool92 10:29, 15 December 2021 (UTC)
• The fact that the statues were blue and that one represented Ackbar should be possibly documented in "Description." LucaRoR ^(Talk) 07:56, 21 December 2021 (UTC)
  • Fixed.--Liverpool92 02:54, 5 January 2022 (UTC)
• The LG does not specify this, but for an analogy of rules with the planet articles, the Description section should document the location. LucaRoR ^(Talk) 15:44, 24 January 2022 (UTC)
  • If you meant adding the planet, done.--Liverpool92 20:14, 31 January 2022 (UTC)
    • Yeah, context should now be provided upon its first mention. LucaRoR ^(Talk) 20:17, 31 January 2022 (UTC)
      • Added.--Liverpool92 02:53, 1 February 2022 (UTC)
• Word count is at 254. LucaRoR ^(Talk) 14:28, 12 February 2022 (UTC)

Lewis

• The Shrines was first revealed in the SW.com preview, which should be listed in sources and mentioned in the BTS.
• The ordering of your sections should be switched and links readjusted to suit the switch Lewisr (talk) 02:49, 13 December 2021 (UTC)
  • Fixed.--Liverpool92 20:47, 13 December 2021 (UTC)
    • Sources aren't appearances, so in this instance it should be 1st in the appearances, and 1stm in the sources. Look at Vharn for example to see what to do (for the BTS as well) Lewisr (talk) 03:56, 14 December 2021 (UTC)
      • Fixed.--Liverpool92 04:36, 14 December 2021 (UTC)
• Context for Mon Cala is intro exlcusive Lewisr (talk) 03:56, 14 December 2021 (UTC)
  • Added.--Liverpool92 04:23, 14 December 2021 (UTC)

UberSoldat

• Should mention that the preview comes from SW.com, which will bring the word count above 250. UberSoldat93 (talk) 07:38, 26 December 2021 (UTC)
  • Fixed.--Liverpool92 04:04, 28 December 2021 (UTC)

Macaroni

• Currently, the intro only describes the subject. A brief history should also be supplied. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 21:00, 2 February 2022 (UTC)
  • Fixed.--Liverpool92 02:56, 3 February 2022 (UTC)
• I'm going to agree that these two sentences are unneeded for this location article: "Organa told Aftab his father would be proud of what he had become. Although Ackbar visited his son once since his spawning, Aftab studied every battle and victory his father participated in." What do you say about removing them? JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 23:43, 16 February 2022 (UTC)
  • Yes. I agree do you want something to replace them or not?--Liverpool92 20:19, 17 February 2022 (UTC)
    • Nah, toss 'em. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 21:31, 17 February 2022 (UTC)
    • Okay, after that plus a copy-edit, the body is below 165 and the intro can be removed. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 02:16, 1 March 2022 (UTC)
      • Fixed.--Liverpool92 20:35, 3 March 2022 (UTC)

Comments

• Word count is currently at 250 exactly. UberSoldat93 (talk) 07:24, 28 December 2021 (UTC)
  • Would I have to withdraw or can we bring it down a word?--Liverpool92 11:53, 28 December 2021 (UTC)
    • Definitely withdraw and renom as a GAN as we don't cut back to avoid the limits. I was also going to suggest mentioning something about Leia being with Ackbar when he died and Aftab's comments on the matter (the second image). Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 12:15, 5 January 2022 (UTC)
      • I think that the conversation would be better suited for Aftab, Leia's, Ackabr, Mission to Mon Cala, and/or a plot summary instead because the article should focus on the shrines. Mentioning the discussion is important too but it doesn't necessarily have to do with the shrines itself.--Liverpool92 02:43, 6 January 2022 (UTC)
        • Words at 250 again. UberSoldat93 (talk) 12:39, 3 February 2022 (UTC)

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 05:52, 5 March 2022 (UTC)