- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a Comprehensive article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Microdetonator
- Nominated by: TK-462 (talk) 01:33, April 22, 2020 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Click, click, BOOM. An older article that I made awhile back, stumbled upon it as I was going through Twilight Company articles to work on.
(3 ECs/2 Users/5 Total)
Support
- Can't wait to see you work on more Twilight Company articles. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 19:33, April 22, 2020 (UTC)
Corellian Premier
The Force will be with you always 16:15, April 29, 2020 (UTC)- Fan26 (Talk) 15:17, April 30, 2020 (UTC)
- UberSoldat93
(talk) 15:21, April 30, 2020 (UTC) - QuiGonJinn (Talk) 11:40, May 2, 2020 (UTC)
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UberSoldat
3 ABY needs a separate reference, there are plenty of Twilight Company articles that have date notes you can use.UberSoldat93 (talk) 06:25, April 22, 2020 (UTC)
Spooky
Coyerti needs context.'packed enough of a punch' seems informal to me, if you could try to fiddle with the wording.—spookywillowwtalk 14:09, April 22, 2020 (UTC)
Anil
Almost the entire first paragraph seems like a speculation to me. I don't see anything in the novel that suggests microdetonators were "similar to thermal detonator" and "were often used when stealth was preferred over a larger, more visible detonator." As far as I can see, the explosive is used only once in the novel, without any specifics for its use. Also, we don't know the exact impact of the explosive as the novel suggests that the rebels think the size of the explosion depends on the "blue barrel" that the device was attached to. "The blast was far too small to be heard outside the bunker walls" on this occasion only.- Good points. I'll see what I can do to try and eliminate as much speculation as possible and get back to you. TK-462 (talk) 17:25, April 22, 2020 (UTC)
- I just deleted most of the section, as most of it was not really verifiable based on the limited info in the book. TK-462 (talk) 17:31, April 22, 2020 (UTC)
- Looks much better, but I still can't find the bit about comparing the device to thermal detonator in the novel. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 18:23, April 22, 2020 (UTC)
- Looks much better, but I still can't find the bit about comparing the device to thermal detonator in the novel.
The first section of the novel, just before "3 ABY," can't be sourced to that reference note, it should be sourced to the novel itself.You don't need to specify "canon" in BTS when the article's subject has nothing to do with Legends. The same goes for the other way around. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 17:08, April 22, 2020 (UTC)
I think you should also mention that the microdetonator in the novel had a timer.Also, I think the sentence that mentions the timer in the novel can be added to the article as a quote.- (Reviewing note) I'd suggest that you read Wookieepedia:Manual of Style#Linking as the article had several linking issues, I've fixed them for you, but please keep these in mind in the future. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 18:23, April 22, 2020 (UTC)
Ben
Coyerti can be specified as a jungle planet/world.- Sixty-First can be introduced in the context for Brand and the squad, which should be linked Hazram Namir's squad, can be specified as Brand's squad.
There's no real world article for book, the article you linked "novel" to is an in universe article, which is invalid for the BTS.Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 18:01, April 22, 2020 (UTC)
Fan
"Microdetonators were detonators that were used as a low profile explosives, and were an indiscreet way of triggering small, targeted explosions, and were equipped with a timer to help add to their effectiveness" This is a run-on sentence, please fix it.Fan26 (Talk) 16:33, April 29, 2020 (UTC)
Comments
- I see I'm no longer leading the Twilight Company effort alone. Keep up the good work. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 18:01, April 22, 2020 (UTC)
Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 11:40, May 2, 2020 (UTC)