Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Master Satele's holocron

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Master Satele's holocron

  • Nominated by: Cade Calrayn GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit 17:01, February 26, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Project Hero. ~213 words, but the BTS is more than half of that.

(2 ECs/1 Users/3 Total)

Support

  1. — DigiFluid(Whine here) 20:15, February 26, 2013 (UTC)
  2. ECvote 501st dogma(talk) 21:31, February 27, 2013 (UTC)
  3. ECvote—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 16:09, February 28, 2013 (UTC)

Object

  • A couple of things I see at first glance (which I'd just fix myself, but hey, it's your CAN):
    • Holocron is linked twice
      • Blarg. The move from Satele Shan's holocron to Master Satele's holocron screwed up the structure of everything.
    • "the Jedi Master known as the Hero of Tython after the Jedi's defeat of the Empire's Sith Emperor" comes across as redundant. Twice, ironically enough.
      • Eh, fixed.
    • Grammatical goof in the first line of BTS: "Master Satele's holocron first appeared as in the video game..."
      • Fixed.
    • BTS: "However, as the Jedi Knight is a Republic character and therefore is assumed to only choose the moral light side options" — preachy value judgement, not neutral POV.
      • Removed the "moral." Cade Calrayn GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit 17:41, February 26, 2013 (UTC)
  • Otherwise I don't think there's really anything wrong with it. — DigiFluid(Whine here) 17:30, February 26, 2013 (UTC)
  • Please source the era in the infobox.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 04:55, February 28, 2013 (UTC)

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