Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Massacre of Myomar

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Massacre of Myomar

• Nominated by: Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 10:05, July 31, 2018 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: The things I get up to in boring lectures. I seem to have developed a habit of filling in backstory battles for Imperials.

(3 ECs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

1. Yo.-User:Fan26 (Talk) 10:17, July 31, 2018 (UTC)
2. Tommy Macaroni 17:26, July 31, 2018 (UTC)
3. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:46, August 1, 2018 (UTC)
4. grunny@wookieepedia:~$ 16:09, August 11, 2018 (UTC)
5. —spookywilloww^talk 17:55, August 11, 2018 (UTC)
6. Imperators II^(Talk) 10:36, August 16, 2018 (UTC)

Object

Tommy

• "and the Massacre of Myomar was one of several battles commanded by the grand admiral,[3] including the Bombardment of Shalam.[2]" Something seems a bit off with this sentence, could you rephrase it? Tommy Macaroni 10:15, July 31, 2018 (UTC)
  • Rephrased. Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 10:51, July 31, 2018 (UTC)

Imp-Il-Raz

• Please format the title of the article correctly in BTS and in all references, where the corresponding citation template should be used. Imperators II^(Talk) 10:17, July 31, 2018 (UTC)
  • Corrected the main reference, I'm not quite following what you're asking for in the Bts, and the citation template looks weird in the timeline reference.
    • Italics vs double-quotes. Imperators II^(Talk) 10:55, July 31, 2018 (UTC)
      • Ah. Done. Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 11:12, July 31, 2018 (UTC)
• If the subject is mentioned in TCSWE but doesn't have an entry of its own, you should use in Sources either {{CSWE|volume number||entry name}} if it's just a single entry, or {{CSWE|jang}} for multiple entries. Imperators II^(Talk) 10:17, July 31, 2018 (UTC)
  • I assume you meant CSWECite, so done. Thanks for correcting the Atlas reference. Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 10:51, July 31, 2018 (UTC)
• The date ref needs to be rewritten. The Insider article doesn't mention a single BBY/ABY date. Imperators II^(Talk) 15:23, August 8, 2018 (UTC)
  • Actually the introduction to the Insider article writes the first one out fully as "two years before the battle of Yavin". Have rewritten it to correctly source 4 ABY. Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 09:51, August 10, 2018 (UTC)
• You have an unsourced item in the infobox. That's like a cardinal sin in these circles. :P Imperators II^(Talk) 21:11, August 11, 2018 (UTC)
  • There is seemingly no limit to the basic shit I can miss.
• I feel like the last sentence of the body is redundant to what the text is saying earlier. Imperators II^(Talk) 21:11, August 11, 2018 (UTC)
  • It's only there so I could acknowledge the Bombardment of Shalam, I'm not quite sure where else to include it, or if that link is even necessary. Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 03:24, August 13, 2018 (UTC)
    • Ideally you should incorporate that into that earlier sentence. If that proves impossible, I'd rather relegate the link to a See also section. Imperators II^(Talk) 20:12, August 13, 2018 (UTC)
      • How's that? Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 02:05, August 16, 2018 (UTC)
        • Perfect. Imperators II^(Talk) 10:36, August 16, 2018 (UTC)

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