Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Markenday Bar

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Markenday Bar

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Support

  1. ECvote Review note: see the "Comma between correlative conjunctions" section here. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 17:08, 20 October 2022 (UTC)
  2. Ziinda FAN part II when? Samonic Signatureicon (Talk) 17:19, 20 October 2022 (UTC)
  3. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 00:50, 23 October 2022 (UTC)
  4. DFaceG (talk) 11:40, 23 October 2022 (UTC)
  5. ECvote Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 13:57, 23 October 2022 (UTC)
  6. ECvote Nice work! Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 20:47, 25 October 2022 (UTC)

Object

Samonic
  • "warlike Grysk species coordinator Jixtus" Missing an apostrophe. Also, them being a species is sufficient context if you want to remove the 'warlike'.
  • A year can be added.
  • Ba'kif doesn't speak Basic. Do what you must do, Ziara. :P
  • Missing link to gender.
  • No need to mention a full name if the individual is only mentioned once.
  • A more specific category (this one) can be added. Remove the parent category when you add this.
  • Please add a period to the quote. Samonic Signatureicon (Talk) 08:22, 22 September 2022 (UTC)
  • Ba'kif suggested Apros to meet Ziinda at the bar to celebrate -> ba'kif tells Ziinda to go to the bar. Please reword.
  • Once you've done the above, please break up the sentence. Samonic Signatureicon (Talk) 09:23, 26 September 2022 (UTC)
  • "and recommended he to wait at the bar." the he should be changed with a "him."
  • The "now" is present, please reword.
  • Missing an apostrophe "subordinates." Samonic Signatureicon (Talk) 18:52, 2 October 2022 (UTC)
    • now is not necessarily a present tense word. for example, the use of the phrase 'just now' is past tense. in 'now-former', the supporting words are past tense, therefore the phrase is past tense. others are done BloodOfIrizi Sabine Starbird (talk) 19:04, 3 October 2022 (UTC)
  • Csaplar is infobox-exclusive. I don't see anything saying that the bar was there, though.
  • You have a redlink.
  • Ba'kif is part of the Expansionary Defense Fleet, not the Defense Force.
  • Full name for Ziinda. Samonic Signatureicon (Talk) 10:19, 9 October 2022 (UTC)
Silver
  • I can't help but notice that there is no infobox on this page at all even though we know where this bar is located, as well as what manner of business it is. SilverSunbird (talk) 23:09, 26 September 2022 (UTC)
Braha
  • "five weeks after Senior Captain Thrawn's last stand, which resulted in one fleet of the Grysk species'" I'm a bit lost on the context here. I also think there's no need to mention the last stand unless it is directly related to the promotion.
  • The capitalisation of Senior Captain is inconsistent. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 18:47, 2 October 2022 (UTC)
    • hows that? the last stand is worth mentioning as that is what caused him to be promoted. caps fixed BloodOfIrizi Sabine Starbird (talk) 16:42, 4 October 2022 (UTC)
      • Ok, I'm going to suggest rearranging so that it states Apros was promoted because of the engagement 5 weeks rather than using that as part of the 18 BBY timestamp. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 17:33, 12 October 2022 (UTC)
        • grysk sentence removed, not relevant BloodOfIrizi Sabine Starbird (talk) 23:49, 14 October 2022 (UTC)
  • One more thing, the quote suggests that Ba'kif told Apros to meet his former commanding officer at the bar, does it not? If so, the article does not really convey that, rather suggesting that the general told the guy to just wait at the bar for a mystery prize :P Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 10:34, 15 October 2022 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 20:47, 25 October 2022 (UTC)