Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Magnatomic grip panel

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Magnatomic grip panel

  • Nominated by: StarWarsFan327 (talk) 14:18, 9 October 2024 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:
  • Date Archived: 15:53, 15 October 2024 (UTC)
  • Final word count: 255 words (0 introduction, 141 body, 114 behind the scenes)
  • Word count at nomination time: 149 words (0 introduction, 94 body, 55 behind the scenes)
  • WookieeProject (optional): Wookieepedia:WookieeProject The Clone Wars

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spookly
  • Per CAs for other droid parts, such as micro-gyro unit, this should use the {{Device}} template as it seems several of the fields will work here.
  • Agamar will need to be contextualized (as a planet or world or otherwise) in the text; it should also be checked if the episode itself supports this; if not, another reference will need to be added.
  • The Rebels events should have the 2 BBY date included, using {{RebelsDate}} for the reference.
  • Usually, when we introduce the Clone Wars upon first mention to the reader, we specify that it was a conflict between the Confederacy of Independent Systems and the Galactic Republic.
  • Ideally, it should be specified somewhat that Kalani is a droid as well; without context, it comes across as a device that organics can install or use themselves.
  • For magazine issues, the full release date (or in this case, an "around" date) is needed for the BtS and should use the linked template for the reference. It also seems like there's some scattered missing italicization in the BtS.
    • I added the "around" date and fixed many missing italicizations. Are there any italicizations still missing? - StarWarsFan327 (talk) 16:57, 12 October 2024 (UTC)
  • The BTS says they "first appeared" in the magazine noted. However, the article then has that they were used by Kalani in Rebels. If the Rebels mention+photo is being treated as this droid part, then Rebels would be the first appearance, and the magazine would be where it was first "identified by name." This would also mean that the Appearances addition for Rebels would have a {{1st}} and the magazine would have a {{1stID}}. However, the point below should be checked below, as:
  • To follow on that last point, if Kalani's limbs/hands as in that photo are being treated as being these panels, then, every appearance of Kalani that shows his hands is considered a source. As such, whatever source first has the hands or palms of the droids visible is then the first appearance, not Rebels, even if not named. The vast majority will be Pictured-only and have no useful info, but they nevertheless need to be listed. (Hadrium alloy is a good example of how a small appearance can have a ton of sources simply due to the nature of it being tied to topic, Zam Wesell, that comes up frequently in material).
  • If gription panels are this article's legends equivalent, this should be added via {{Top}} to have the Canon/Legends tabs working.—spookywillowwtalk 18:35, 9 October 2024 (UTC)
  • Per the rest of above, the images from these sources, primarily of Kalani I'd assume, should be put into an image category so that this page can have an appropriate {{Mediacat}}.
    • Should I add the image category just for Kalani as he's the droid I'm focusing on, or should I also add the imagecat for super tactical droids as well as create an image category for the grip panels themselves? - StarWarsFan327 (talk) 21:03, 12 October 2024 (UTC)
Wok
  • The part saying "in both the Clone Wars Battle of Onderon and the mission to Agamar" makes it seem like both of these events are in the Clone Wars era. Dates for both the events should probably be used instead.
  • I would recommend moving that last sentence to be with the other descriptive details earlier in the article as opposed to tacking it onto the end of the historical bits.
    • Fixed and I moved the last sentence to before the history. - StarWarsFan327 (talk) 17:23, 12 October 2024 (UTC)
  • Here's a minor thing I copyedited myself but just wanted you to be cognizant of. When you're pipelinking something that is plural, leave the "s" inside the brackets as opposed to outside of it (see the Formatting section in the Linking section here). Wok142 (talk) 17:51, 11 October 2024 (UTC)
  • I think you can be more more specific about the "few rebels" that were captured by referring to them as the Spectres. I would also recommend using a slightly more formal word like several as opposed to "a few"
  • Aut-O has a few handy instances similar to Kalani that could probably stand to be mentioned - shooting at D-Squad during a fight and also handling buzz droids. Same with this one, who handles a datapad. One approach to mentioning all of these instances succinctly would just be to say something to the effect of: the grip panels let them handle tools/equipment like datapads (mention example) or helmets (example), as well as wield blasters (examples) Wok142 (talk) 23:41, 13 October 2024 (UTC)
Lew
  • 'During the Clone Wars, a conflict between the Confederacy of Independent Systems and the Galactic Republic, the palms and inner surface of the Separatists' super tactical droids' hands were fitted with magnatomic grip panels.' since the droids also had them outside of the Clone Wars as well (Kalani for example) I'd recommended switching it around a little to just indicate the droids were fitted with them generally and then mention the Clone Wars later Lewisr (talk) 22:40, 14 October 2024 (UTC)
  • If the grips are mentioned/pictured in Star Wars: Droidography, then the in-universe mention/depiction in Droidography will need to be included, see Jek-14 for example Lewisr (talk) 22:40, 14 October 2024 (UTC)
  • For the air date in the BTS, you can just say 'first aired on [date]' or something rather than mentioning the Canadian air date and then the release in other countries Lewisr (talk) 22:40, 14 October 2024 (UTC)

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