Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Lothal Papyri

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Lothal Papyri

Nominated by: Dentface (talk) 14:02, 1 July 2021 (UTC)
Nomination comments: Word count clocks in at 89, excluding BTS section and introductory quote.

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Support

UberSoldat93 (talk) 11:31, 2 July 2021 (UTC)
Well done on your first CAN! OOM 224 ^{༼༽talk༼༽} 22:42, 6 July 2021 (UTC)
I had a teacher whose go-to threat was to make us write out the entire dictionary backwords. Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 11:36, 7 July 2021 (UTC)

Object

Erebus

~~Please merge paragraphs 2 and 3. They're small enough to make one paragraph.~~ Erebus Chronus ^(Talk) 14:05, 1 July 2021 (UTC)
- Done. Dentface (talk) 14:08, 1 July 2021 (UTC)
~~Is it necessary to mention that Braylon and Kostana were childhood friends? If not, please remove it.~~ Erebus Chronus ^(Talk) 14:58, 1 July 2021 (UTC)
- Done. Dentface (talk) 15:21, 1 July 2021 (UTC)
  - Made a copy-edit. Erebus Chronus ^(Talk) 15:47, 1 July 2021 (UTC)

UberSoldat

Hello and welcome to the CAN! To start off:
- ~~Context is needed for almost all of the subjects named in the article (i.e. the characters and Coruscant).~~
- ~~Ref 2 only needs to source the date it's explaining, not the entire sentence.~~ UberSoldat93 (talk) 14:18, 1 July 2021 (UTC)
  - Thanks for the warm welcome! I added these suggestions, let me know if there's anything else. Dentface (talk) 14:29, 1 July 2021 (UTC)
    - Context also needed for Sifo-Dyas and Dooku. Also, does the story identify Lothal and Coruscant as planets and the latter as the Republic capital? UberSoldat93 (talk) 14:34, 1 July 2021 (UTC)
      - I added the context that Dooku and Sifo-Dyas were initiates at the time. Is that sufficient, or should I expand upon who they became in adulthood? The story only lists Lothal as the location the papyri are about, not explicitly as a planet. Coruscant itself is mentioned heavily, but only as the location of the Jedi Temple/Archives and as a major city within the Galactic Core. Dentface (talk) 14:39, 1 July 2021 (UTC)
        I expanded the sentence regarding Dooku and Sifo-Dyas as requested. Dentface (talk) 14:50, 1 July 2021 (UTC)
        Yeah you only need to specify who they were at that point in time. The planet stuff needs separate references. You can also do without the "Republic capital" part. UberSoldat93 (talk) 15:00, 1 July 2021 (UTC)
        Okay. I reverted my previous edit, and the article now only refers to Dooku and Sifo-Dyas as initiates. Is that sufficient? I removed the "Republic capital" part, but you explicitly mentioned that extra context is needed for Coruscant. How do you recommend I go about that? I also cited Lothal as a planet via Star Wars: The Visual Encyclopedia. Dentface (talk) 15:06, 1 July 2021 (UTC)
        Coruscant as a planet needs a separate reference like you did with Lothal. UberSoldat93 (talk) 15:33, 1 July 2021 (UTC)
        Done. Dentface (talk) 15:37, 1 July 2021 (UTC)
~~I'm confused as to what the connection is between the Bogan Collection break-in and Sifo-Dyas and Dooku's assignment.~~ UberSoldat93 (talk) 15:33, 1 July 2021 (UTC)
- The assignment was the punishment for breaking into the Bogan Collection. I rewrote the sentence to make that more clear. Dentface (talk) 15:37, 1 July 2021 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 17:22, 8 July 2021 (UTC)