- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a comprehensive article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Lohjoy
- Nominated by: Darth Karikawill destroy your planet! 00:33, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: (L)oh joy!
(4 ECs/1 Users/5 Total)
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- Reverend Lohjoy. Menkooroo 15:36, September 11, 2010 (UTC)
Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 01:50, September 15, 2010 (UTC)- --Eyrezer 23:24, September 15, 2010 (UTC)
- SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is the truth) 06:49, September 18, 2010 (UTC)
Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 07:25, September 21, 2010 (UTC)
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I think you can add a fair amount of context to this, Ie, you currently don't even mention the war Lohjoy was involved in. Does it give a skin color for Lohjoy? Not all Ho'Din are green. --Eyrezer 22:20, September 9, 2010 (UTC)- Added context. Nope, it doesn't give a skin color. Darth Karikawill destroy your planet! 22:57, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
Is it Omen or "The Omen"? The article flip-flops.Menkooroo 15:14, September 11, 2010 (UTC)- It's just Omen. Corrected. Darth Karikawill destroy your planet! 15:17, September 11, 2010 (UTC)
- Cav:
While Lohjoy was transmitting a hologram to Omen's commander, Yaru Korsin, her snake-like Ho'Din hair caught on fire; she was subsequently killed by a hull breach. Currently this reads like her hair caught on fire because she was sending a hologram, which I'm sure probably isn't the case. Can you tweak it slightly, maybe adding how her hair actually caught on fir (if known) to remove the implication?- Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 10:10, September 12, 2010 (UTC)
- Reworded. Darth Karikawill destroy your planet! 12:06, September 12, 2010 (UTC)
- Soresu
Could you give the quote some sort of context? Otherwise, it's confusing why it just cuts off abruptly.SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is the truth) 23:03, September 15, 2010 (UTC)- Done. Darth Karikawill destroy your planet! 00:56, September 16, 2010 (UTC)
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