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Kukula nut
- Nominated by: —spookywillowwtalk 04:11, August 10, 2019 (UTC)
- Nomination comments:
(3 ECs/0 Users/3 Total)
Support
Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 19:03, August 15, 2019 (UTC)
Fan26 (Talk) 19:14, August 15, 2019 (UTC)
Imperators II(Talk) 15:06, August 16, 2019 (UTC)
Object
Zed
"Mister Bones, the repurposed B1 battle droid of Wexley's son Temmin, helped her escape and rendezvous with a shuttle Emari acquired." Could you reword this sentence to make it clearer as to who "her" refers to?Zed42 (talk) 07:42, August 12, 2019 (UTC)- Tweaked.—spookywillowwtalk 19:28, August 12, 2019 (UTC)
Fan
Is the use of the Life Debt dating template really necessary? It focuses on Life Debt's dating, and I would think that Galactic Atlas dating the Battle of Jakku to 5 aby would be enough to say Empire's End takes place in that year. Fan26 (Talk) 18:50, August 12, 2019 (UTC)- Took that out.—spookywillowwtalk 19:28, August 12, 2019 (UTC)
- Though it's obvious how it works, I think the second sentence in the ref note needs a 'therefore' clause tacked on to make the dating logic explicitly clear. Fan26 (Talk) 03:59, August 14, 2019 (UTC)
- Does that work?—spookywillowwtalk 20:35, August 14, 2019 (UTC)
- Though it's obvious how it works, I think the second sentence in the ref note needs a 'therefore' clause tacked on to make the dating logic explicitly clear. Fan26 (Talk) 03:59, August 14, 2019 (UTC)
- Took that out.—spookywillowwtalk 19:28, August 12, 2019 (UTC)
Anil
I think the article should specifically mention that these events occured during the Battle of Jakku. By doing that, you could also get rid of the manual reference note and simply source the year to Galactic Atlas.Was that a stolen Imperial shuttle or Emari's personal shuttle? If known, I think the shuttle's origin should be specified as that was where the Kukula nuts were found.I think there are some details about the events which are not relevant to this page: mentions of Mister Bones and Temmin, taking an escape pod to escape etc. Just saying that she escaped from the Imperial captivity with Emari should suffice.I think this objection will automatically be satisfied per the objection above, but it's not clear here which Wexley eats nuts: "Once on board, Wexley consumed survival rations…"Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 01:16, August 15, 2019 (UTC)
Also, according to Norra, there was "no good food" in the survival rations. You can mention that too.Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 01:37, August 15, 2019 (UTC)
- Think I got all of those, hopefully.—spookywillowwtalk 18:30, August 15, 2019 (UTC)
- (Reviewing note) Please be careful for double spaces in the future.
Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 19:03, August 15, 2019 (UTC)
Imp
Any quotes?Imperators II(Talk) 14:18, August 16, 2019 (UTC)- Never mind, Anil had already checked there aren't any to be had. Imperators II(Talk) 15:06, August 16, 2019 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 08:07, August 17, 2019 (UTC)