Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Kishka

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Kishka

• Nominated by: Lewisr (talk) 03:02, 8 October 2024 (UTC)
• Nomination comments:
• Date Archived: 17:44, 13 October 2024 (UTC)
• Final word count: 140 words (0 introduction, 125 body, 15 behind the scenes)
• Word count at nomination time: 139 words (0 introduction, 124 body, 15 behind the scenes)
• WookieeProject (optional): WP:GE WP:NOVELS

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Support

1. Wok142 (talk) 17:29, 8 October 2024 (UTC)
2. kitties —spookywilloww^talk 20:51, 11 October 2024 (UTC)
3. CometSmudge (talk) 17:43, 13 October 2024 (UTC)

Object

Wok

• First sentence - to avoid saying "with" twice in a four-word span, what if you went for "Kishka was a tooka cat who had tan fur with black stripes" ?
  • Tweaked Lewisr (talk) 16:41, 8 October 2024 (UTC)
• Second sentence, the "for sale kept in a crate in the Creature Stall" part could be smoothed out. Something like "kept for sale in a crate at the Creature Stall" flows better in my opinion.
  • Works for me, thanks, changed it to that Lewisr (talk) 16:41, 8 October 2024 (UTC)
• I think the Creature Stall should be explicitly contextualized as a business Wok142 (talk) 04:51, 8 October 2024 (UTC)
  • I changed owned by to operated by which imo, along with saying the tookas were for sale there, should be enough to cover that Lewisr (talk) 16:41, 8 October 2024 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 17:43, 13 October 2024 (UTC)